All Comments on 'Double or Nothing Pt. 02'

Love the twins part of the story. Definitely one of my youthful fantasies.

I thought Part 1 was engaging and well done. I try not to get into stories that haven’t yet had all the parts posted, but I was so interested that I kept going. I won’t rate this, though, because polygamy (or whatever this is) isn’t my cup of tea. Still, it is well- and thoughtfully written.

****Good long read. Thanks for sharing.

Part One was brilliant but after about page three or four I just deleted this and future chapters

It had such guts then I am afraid it just fell apart

A great writer but not my sort of story

Like several others I thought pt 1 set a good table for the story. This has wandered off into fantasy world. I'll read a bit more and see if you can rescue it.

Twins, beautiful twins is a fantasy of most guys. Especially those who are aware of the BARBI TWINS and how both of them ended up married to the same minor celebrity actor. Google it. It's real

Thats a long time to not fuck… i have a threesome solution for them, solution, one rides the dick the other rides the tongue.

Another fine story. The sex with the twins was a bit over the top but the story as a whole was interesting and well written.

I liked this one a lot better than the first part. But one thing kept tickling in the back of my mind...one of my favourite songs by The Lovin Spoonful:

Sometimes you really dig a girl the moment you kiss her

And then you get distracted by her older sister

When in walks her father and takes you in line

And says "Better go on home, son, and make up your mind"

Then you bet you'd better finally decide!

And say yes to one and let the other one ride

There's so many changes, and tears you must hide

Did you ever have to finally decide?

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You took an inordinately long time between the first shower together and their first love making though. Even though I prefer the slow burn, this drug on and on. I gave you a 4/5.

Excellent 2nd part Mate! 5 BIG ASS FAT STARS!

Still a good story going strong. Years ago I new guy the lived with two woman and they seemed happy and acted normally so it seems a man cab live with two woman or vice a versa if everyone is compatible and there is no jealousy or competition for affection. After all the Mormons had that going for years and there is til some going on today but not blatantly, Don't apologize for your writing as it it is your writing and imagination, If people don't like it they won't read it. I'm not into the sex scenes that much because of my age but I am into the story. 5stars

I have enjoyed the story. I was and I guess I still am disappointed in the way you have put this long separation of story line development into this engaging story. The beginning is the reappearance of the two characters causing his heartache; then we plunge back in time to get caught up and flesh out characters. I am not a fan of this. I do not mind back and forth time warps normally but this just seems so odd and ending busting some how.

But that said even with your minor editing type slip ups this is a magnificent story. I am hooked for the long haul unless the coming chapters somehow manage to bomb. Can’t see it happening but...

To answer your question I am captivated by the twins.

Thanks for sharing. John

very good so far 5 stars

Can't he just meet the sisters and help them out, without it being life and death ? Will he end up in the hospital every chapter ?

Too dramatic without any reason for it.

Reading through again, still waiting for Pt.5.

I'm enjoying the story and a little implausibility never bothers me in fiction. I would ask if you use a microphone and dictate your work to a processing program, as homophones keep showing up in your work. Just a suggestion; read it out loud to yourself when you've finished, as your ear will often pick up errors like this, that your eyes simply sweep past.

Oh, and by the way, there isn't an earl of Lancashire and never was. There is an earl of Lancaster, however, which refers to his bloodline rather than the county. It doesn't make any difference to the read, just thought you'd like to know.

Well done. Thank you, sir.

Amazing story. You’ve done well, and even chose the perfect points to end each chapter (so far).

What an interesting story concept. Having visited Australia and Tasmania I can say that i found the people there very wonderful to their American visitors. Thank you!

Ohhh 22k words more drivel. Can't wait.

Good fast read.

Thanks for the Twins, hell, I fell in love with them. I hope there is some lucky guy enjoying the love of such a loving pair of ladies. Most of us are lucky if we can find just one.

Haha fun fantasy! Can’t wait to read part 3. This was very enjoyable.

The twins part was completely unnecessary and turned what so far what a great story into a male fantasy. I won't say it ruined the story but it cheapened it.

thanks, fun read. Unfortunately, I know a few people that are all about the Money, moral and feelings are 2nd to money

Good story. Just need a little better work with an editor.

When I got Divorced My ex got half of My 401 . I figured I would rather give half up front then have her take some of the 401 every month . Now Thanks to a couple of Raises My 401 is almost back to where it was originally . I am glad that My ex and her Soul Mate were greedy and wanted the lump Sum . 4 Stars on this one

Twins part ruined the story, if he had a romantic connection with only one of the twins it would of been great.

I have to admit the twins take this into fantasy territory, but so do a lot of over-the-top revenge stories. That being said, the twin's names are a metaphor for the relationship. As in music, Melody and Harmony complement each other. Each by themselves are good, together they make the whole better.

I fucked twins when in college, unfortunately they were faithless whores! I like your story, fuck everyone else! Rock on!!!!!!

Stop apologizing n write ur story. Its a great story keep up the great work n for those who want to bitch its just like tv n radio if u dont like it u can just go to another im really enjoying it. story.

Great story so far. For anyone that gives you grief just tell the it's YOUR world and T

YOUR rules... LOL

I enjoy your take of two sisters who are NOT bi-sexual falling in love with the same man. Never saw that coming. THANK YOU for a fun story. Will start on ch.3 shortly.

The story is pretty good. I think most of wish the sex was that good with just one woman/ I'm npt a greedy person and really have no fantasies.

I love it

keep the awesome coming

interesting and enjoyable read.

Fantastic fantasy.

Chapter 1 captured my interest. Chapter 2 put me to sleep. I hope Chapter 3 isn't more filler.

OK, looks like things got quite a bit better with the editing this time around. Still not perfect, for sure, but not quite as much of a mess! Hope things continue to improve in the next installments!

Still a very enjoyable story! Great job creating characters that the reader can actually love - or love to hate!! lol!

-T-

Good second part. He is in a better place now, twins or not.

LONG DRAWN OUT STORY

Like the story a lot. AAAA++++

I never thought I'd see Supercars referenced in a Literotica story, but there's a first time for everything I guess hahah

I love the twin's

Part 1 has chapter breaks, this one has... well, little goofy symbols to mark a break in the flow? Not very consistent, and to chunk polyamory in there... kind of a downer, though as you say you did it for your own reasons. Grats, I guess?

Yes… this definitely going to be a great series! I love how to frame all the issues; at least issues that I can think of. You don’t go too ever-board with his should I or shouldn’t I. You put the twins in the conquer all attitude that would made the, extremely selfish. No… you make the twins to be totally intelligent, caring and thoughtful individuals with over-flowing love for Terry and love & respect for each other. Maybe… maybe a little hint with the nightingale syndrome ( just a little). Very, very good job with the writing! I am throughly enjoying this read. Thank-you for your talent!

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I love the twin's""""

You love the what, what thing of the twins do you love?? ;)

Even if you are writing for yourself, I am enjoying this set of stories. Terry is getting an emotional roller coaster ride of emotions. I can not wait to read on. Thanks for your writing.

Beautiful Red headed twin sex!!! Ultimate fantasy!!!

I hope you give the rest of the story the same quality that you have done so far. Really great so far.

If anyone doesn't like the story, they are free to not read :)

Easy 5 stars - very good story.

Had to drop out halfway. Too much serendipity for me.

So far I’ve Liked this for 5’s. I noticed a big change in using correct words & grammar and is much less distracting. Good job!

Bill S.

It’s turned into a 13 year old boys fantasy, not my cup of tea⭐️⭐️

I’m riveted, I don’t feel the author should have to apologize for what he is writing. You’re taking us on the ride you imagined. We either enjoy or not. I enjoy, 5 stars.

Good

Oh Yeah!!! You go Man!

this line is a classic, "my manhood was suddenly hard despite my blood loss." i love this. 2 red head beauties and a good looking luck guy. forget those other bitches, ex and daughter. this guy is my hero.

Eh, this will be the last chapter of this story I'll read. It has an awful lot of words for hardly anything happening and so little advancement in plot. This chapter could have easily been edited to half its length. We're given the same thoughts in his mind and conversations between characters multiple times. I skimmed a lot, because it's so repetitive.

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I'm here for storytelling, not just sex, but by the time sex showed up I was bored and skimmed that too. I was caught by surprise when right after the sisters said they'll have sex with Terry but absolutely not with each other they proceeded to have sex with all three of them in the bed with one sister watching and him going back and forth between the two swapping bodily fluids amongst the three of them. The author even tagged it as a threesome, as if it were just polyamory, but it reeks of incest to me, and it's a major turnoff.

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I know this story is a bit of fantasy, but as it goes on it reads more and more like a teenager's wet dream or fantasy, and it becomes increasingly difficult to suspend disbelief. The coincidences and serendipity in these first two chapters are too much.

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Of course, the sisters are dazzling red heads with emerald eyes, because that's not nearly as uncommon on this site as it is real life. I'm just glad to have not read, "fiery redhead" yet.

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Martha and William see a doctor previously unknown to them for a quick check on a broken ankle or whatever in a town very far from their own, and not only do they become close friends, but they talk the guy into uprooting his family and career to move to their neighborhood. C'mon.

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What's required to get a restraining order against someone in Australia who doesn't have a criminal record or history of abuse? You can't get one just because you want one. I found that piece possibly more far-fetched than all the coincidences.

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I have an issue with Terry constantly referring to his teenage daughter (or ex-daughter) as a woman. He does that a lot when he's talking about his ex-wife and daughter even though his daughter was fifteen when they left him. The affair had been going on for a last a year-and-a-half, meaning the daughter was only thirteen when her mom began the affair and began manipulating her against her dad. Neither of those are adult ages, and calling her a woman instead of recognizing that she's a highly impressionable kid who's obviously been manipulated by her mother for years doesn't sit right with me. It's mostly that, the repetition, and the borderline incest that killed my interest in this story.

Still incredable storytelling and more creative than ever.

A man can dream, but for me this story is just too naive and cheap. Anyway, thank you for your effort.

5 Stars on a good story . But you did mix up the twins once . But then again I am no great poet

This is For anonymous 3 months ago. You are a fuckking idiot. You must be a failed writer, why else would you be here bitching on this forum. Get a life.

Love this story, saw a lot of failed writers and envious people posting about this in comments. Good job. Haters will always be haters as they have no talent.

The writing was good but the hero worship was so thick and unrealistic. No one is that wonderful. I stopped reading. Dont stop writing just write more realistic stories.

You initially said the twins had D-cup breasts, but in the last scene you said C-cup.

Also (and this maybe my misconception) at the beginning, I thought that Melody & Harmony were in their late 20's based upon their accomplishments and the ages given for William and Martha. In the last scene I got the impression that the incident at school was much more recent, indicating the girls were in their early 20's. Would would clarify please?

I agree with the truth-speakers...haters will be haters, and they should just move on, without making comments about what they"like/do not like" about this story.

As the author said, he is telling a story, anx is writing for himself; yet, he shows his awareness of his readers with his comments, and appreciates our being here!

The drama is an aside for this; my main focus is on the on-going emotional relationship between Terry, Harmony, and Melody!! Plus their parents and Terry' mom & dad!

Ready for the next chapters...Five**5**Stars for this one!!

Wonderful piece of creative writing. Thankyou for inviting me into your universe.

Having a hard time figuring out TEXASMADDOG's comment. Maybe I misunderstood his intent.

He writes

,,,they should just move on, without making comments about what they"like/do not like" about this story." BUT, the author writes "As always, all feedback is welcome, and I love reading what you liked and didn't like;" It seems like complete contradiction.

Agree that authors write for themselves; On the other hand, they also want others to read their creations, hence why they post. Posting in LW category the most read and commented tends to prove. There are safer areas to post, but it must be a thrill to see read counts in the five figures.

Of course, with the activity there will be a greater chance of divergence of opinion. It's the nature of the beast and comes with the territory. So post here is a "No guts, no glory" scenario. Those who are tough enough and are good get the red H's, like this series. With 230+ favorites, one would think this story has not been harmed by a few negative nellies. Besides, the author has the ultimate say when it comes to comments.

5 stars for the story.

You write the story you want. This is excellent.

You don't need to apologize for writing long stories...you do so wonderfully and I find myself enraptured by them. I love a good story and CMON who the hell wouldn't want twin identical redheads without the drama!! Keep em coming! (pun intended)

Not very realistic in pacing and some story parts, but overall it's great, wholesome stuff that can be hard to find on this site

Readint the story series, for a second time, and greatly enjoy the story.

Cheesey

I'm loving this story so far. GOOD JOB! I know that I won't rest until I read the whole story. Can't wait ♡

Don't apologise unless a genuine mistake, great story, enjoying it. Now I appreciate the title.

Just saying, but there's something not right about women who get past 18 let alone 21 and are still virgins. It just smacks of problems and is a massive red flag.

Beyond campy with the ridiculous twin sisters. Come on, man...you're a better writer than this.

I think I'm becoming a real sucker for this story. I thought that the pace of engagement between Terry, Harmony and Melody was perfect. That part is a love story, not some rabid revenge fuck.

Please be careful if using historical or factual references. The Great or Great, Great Grandfather was not The Earl of Lancaster, that title disappeared and in 1351 became a Dukedom. The Duke of Lancaster is quite well known, it is a title held by the current Monarch. After a formal meal, the loyal toast in Lancashire or parts of the new counties that were in Lancashire is/was, The King/The Queen, The Duke of Lancaster. The National Anthem may be sung, substituting the line "Long Live Our Noble Duke." If you are going to get titles wrong, not a good title to get wrong.

Harmony and Melody seem like true angels. I'm waiting for Terry to call them, Chan and Magnolia at some point. Though a fan of calling children traditional family related names if the three have daughters, I'm waiting for the names Rhapsody, Symphony or Destiny to be used. Please someone else catch up on my Harmony and Melody reference? It's a very 21st Century or Century 21 link.

Well all I can say is that who doesn't like the twins aspect of the story not even counting the twins part I can guarantee that every guy has had the fantasy of dating to women at the same time who knows about each other and is not jealous the twins is just a added bonus while I can't be sure that even all women has had that fantasy I can be sure that a lot more than likely has had it so like I who wouldn't like it lol however though this really isn't a loving wife story but I have unfortunately got used to seeing these types of stories in the loving wife category though it doesn't make sense to me as of why other than it's exllenet series as I have read this a couple of different times

GREAT that something nice like love times two is happening to our protagonist! Love it all so far - thanks for sharing Mr Other!

To “Anonymousabout 2 months ago

Just saying, but there's something not right about women who get past 18 let alone 21 and are still virgins. It just smacks of problems and is a massive red flag”. Many women don’t sleep around. Others good women do lose their virginity at 14 to 16 it’s not a red flag to wait, and though most who lose it early do recover it’s far less of a good thing.

I'm liking this story. Ok a little male fantasy led and at times not really realistic but it's carrying me along nicely. Where next?

still stickin! so is our hero ******

I've been reading LW compulsively for a few months, and beyond the LW topics there are 2 things that I treasure in these stories. One is PLACES. Places I've been and places I want to go - for instance, GaryAPB's series "Back to Bristol". Very long, wonderful series that makes me want to experience Bristol UK.

The other is bourbon whiskey. I have a good knowledge of Scotch and Irish whiskies, but my bourbon days are far in the past and I'm not up on the immense range of bourbon available today. My son, however, is extensively well-versed in bourbon. Michters was new to me, and new to my son. And he LOVED it. Score one for dad!

Thanks, other2other1, for the wonderful stories, and the whiskey!

This story has a good premise and could have been good, but the prose is aweful. The dialog is ruined by a lack of contractions and way too many exclamation points. It feels unnatural and stilted. Any time a character displays emotional exposition I can't help but to imagine the author was guessing what a normal human would feel rather than expressing what a fleshed out character felt. Its almost bot-like, as if an AI wrote the story. Organic life form A cares for organic life form B. Organic life forms C, X and Y approve. It is very touching. Do you agree, fellow humans?

It's a great story, a bit of spelling and grammar needs correcting, but the only big problems were (1) at the beginning I think you mixed up the names and called Melody Harmony, which he wouldn't do. (2) You used the earl of lancashire, it's extinct and was superceded by the Duchy, no way could they be related to that. Anyone that knows about titles will know that. Would have been better to just make something up or use an obscure one.

Love each & every single part of this..

Bill S.

Michters had a small still not far from where I live in Pennsylvania. I bought a 1/5 bottle of their raw clear distillate & nursed it for around 20 years. Their PA still shut down & obviously someone resurrected the brand as was done before. I hope their product is as good as the last inteneration.

Bill S.

Re, your premise…..From experience, it is possible to love two, slightly different, women equally and not be able, or want to, choose between them.

It's nice to see Terry catch a bit of a break (unlikely as the scenario may be), having two gorgeous, red-headed, green-eyed, identical twins fall for him. Good for him :) Shame that only one was a virgin but I guess that would have been TOO perfect/unrealistic. But the way it happened, sounds kind of like she was possibly drugged (or at least plied with a lot of alcohol) and with a guy called Chad, really? That's kind of lame. Could have done without that honestly. It added nothing to the story and instead only cheapened it a little when it was a perfect moment to make it just that little bit more special. Oh well, swing and a miss, I guess.

Their first time together was a little disappointing. He didn't even cum in any of them. Kind of a waste of a special moment in their relationship, in my opinion. I sometimes wonder what the authors are thinking when they make decisions like this.

Anyway, those minor grievances aside, it's a great story so far and I'm looking forward to reading the rest of it. I wonder what drama is around the corner with the bitches and Dr. Dickhead on the scene.

Well done a man's fantasy dream.

Out-Effing-Standing!!!!!!

This section was done better with fewer confusing areas and mixing of characters. Some of the dialogue felt a little stiff and unnatural, but maybe that’s due to cultural differences (I’m In the US, not Australia). Mostly well done and quite entertaining.

i LOVE IT. sTARTED READIJNG ITN A YEAR AGO AND SOME HOW LOST. sO HAPPY io 'M BACK ANND TAKEN PRECAUTIONS

The first chapter was dramatic, rather unlikely ,but a good read. Now it's turned into a teenage fantacy, farce

Great continuation of the story. Still some grammatical errors here and there.

The whole twin thing is quite a fantasy. To me, it detracts from the story, but obvious twin fantasies are popular.

Your composition and grammar are somewhat better in this second episode, but still needs work. Looking forward to the next episode.

What was to old chewing gum commercial, "Double your pleasure double your fun"? Seems like Terry and the twins took it to heart. Not sure if this development adds anything to the original story, except throwing polygyny and a lot of sex into it. I still like the writing and I'm not giving up on it yet. After all, isn't it every mans dream to be in bed with two beautiful women? Got to check out the next chapter.