All Comments on 'Dragon (S)Layers Ch. 32'

Hey buddy you need to start getting your story line straight. You jump around a lot and still haven't done any thing with Ammy. In a town that small ( one small stinky inn) it is almost impossible to hide. Any way I don't mean to sound like a doubter or a pouter but you need to get the group together and foucsed on the quest. Hey I like your characters and your story is interesting enough for me to enjoy reading all 32 of them. Keep up the good work.

Hey, thanks for commenting and for the honest feedback. I agree, it needs to be tightened up drastically. . . I have a huge tendency to over write, but when I'm doing the revisions and stuff it gets tightened up considerably. That said, Ammy is going to be making a return in the next volume once I get it all plotted out and stuff. I'm going to sit down next month and hash out the next volume in detail before I start writing, maybe it'll keep things tighter. Thanks again for the feedback,I really appreciate it. I need someone to kick my ass up in between my ears now and then to keep me focused. :)