All Comments on 'Dream of Me'

Breed the little slut

Even though there are a great many readers who consider step-something outside the realm of incest, this story isn't even that. You fraudulently inform the readers that there is a step-dad involved.

That little piece of paper that would make him her step-dad doesn't exist. This is simply a young girl taking advantage of an older man. That doesn't make it incest, not even pseudo-incest like a step-dad would be.

It's ALWAYS a rating of 1.

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Yeah, the tags show "2nd person pov". So what, the tags can't be seen until the story is open. Too little, too late.

Worst I've read in many years.

Not worth a star

These harsh criticisms

Before my comment . . .

Simply the sexual paroxysms

of men aroused by your story

helplessly showing what arousal does for them.

But I must clean my cum from the floor

beneath my desk

Thankful for how you have aroused

and satisfied this tired old man

–lorencino (having trouble logging in)

I love the dream-like inner commentary as she whores herself out to him for breeding. There are many young girls who dream of this, but few who can write of it in such arousing detail. Nice!

Smart concept, executed well. Nicely done.

This was pretty amazing I am sad you stopped just standing on the edge my favorite stories are the ones that clearly could never happen in real life. The way you directed your words felt very fluid. I could easily see myself looking from the characters perspective and writing anything that is truly important. I am not an English major by any means but I can write and I am creative so hats off to you :D

I wish we could give Zero stars.

Wow, there sure are some angry losers around.

This story is beautiful, I love your language. Am I frustrated and horny having finished it? Why yes I am. Would I read another chapter if you wrote it? Of course! But just getting me this turned on is worthwhile, I'm quite capable of finishing on my own. Five stars.

I loved it. This was so amazing. Kinda wish I could be the one laying there and take the action to continue the story by lots of passion and lust to end with me filling you with my seed

Ohhhh myyyyy, now this is my type of story. I wonder how it will end.