All Comments on 'Dreamboat Ch. 02'

great sex scene

wonderful characters

Love your story line. Stranded in a boat, developing love story, discovering what resources they have, the need to figure out where they are, where they want to go and how to get there. Swiss family robinson story on a boat. Could go a lot of different directions with this story. Just need a lot more chapters to read. Please continue.

I'm now following this wonderful story. Love your writing. Congrats, I hope you keep it up. :)

“... and the boat sailed on and on and on and on and on.”

Story good so far. In fact very good.

Can't wait to see where it's going... oh wait... lol, i don't have to. You've already got a bunch more written... woohoo.

Ch. 2 page 1 towards the end of the page the narrator says " But he could feel her hands on him, feel her breath over his straining erection, feel the silken , fairly - light touch of her hair on his thighs. "

Then 2 paragraphs later, the narrator says, " She quickly unraveled the turban and gave her long golden hair a last quick rub before finger - combing it out "

Oops, small error, not a big deal but it was a mistake that jumped out at me. otherwise great so far.

Great development of the plot. You are a good storyteller

Again 5/5