All Comments on 'Dreamboat Ch. 10'

I like the story and the mystery. Keep writing for sure.

Quite enjoyable. Characters are still holding true while the plot meanders in an intriguing gripping path to who knows where.

I need one of those boats!

I'll be waiting for more!

If still confusing about the boat. If only the beatles had had this boat instead of a bus in their movie. At least the sex would have given the movie some interest.

I assume the last bit after the PS was not what he was reading on the screen. It seemed like the boat was actually telling them something, especially after the girls silent reaction.

I hope you have a realistic, tangible, believable reason for the boat and its wondrous behaviour. Would hate to finish reading for so long to be left high and dry.

Strange but it keeps me comming back. I'm pretty sure that indicates a good author.

keep writing, hope to read ch.11 soon.

This is a great saga, and I worried about the tension slacking, but that did not happen. I just hope the boat mystery can be resolved without too much metaphysicality

Can't wait for Ch. 11.... argg, I guess I have to though :(

I figured she had to be someone's daughter for them to be looking for her that hard.

Apologies to readers. Chapter 11 had to be pulled back for a fix, rewrite and edit. It is on its way. Technical problems abound.

Im loving this faster more faster more great read thanks.

Please persevere. Your readers are hoping you can find a solution or successfully contact a moderator.

Thank you.

((( around Lachlan like a grapevine, she began to alternate between kissing every part of him that she could reach, and sobbing as if her heart had broken.

Above the couple, Wren and Honey stared at each other wide-eyed.

"Wow!" mouthed Honey.

"This is why he's captain," said Wren smugly, patting Reid on the butt. )))

After reading Wren's line, "This is why he's captain,", I started laughing my ass off.

YOU, Snoozin'Jim are one hell of a writer... and not just because of that line. You're one of maybe five exceptionally gifted writers that I've found on these sites who have the gift/talent and have worked at building an extensive vocabulary, kept notes for a reference glossary, takes time to research a subject for accuracy and continually honed/hones their writing skills.

You truly are one of the Great Writers.

The writing is good, but this just isnt coming together I guess quickly enough to hold my interest. And I know when I get thru Chapt 11 I am going to have to wait on another approx 50% of the narrative. Not nearly as good as the Highway challenge story. Please write all of it and then post it, even if it is a year from now. This drips and drabs is annoying.

It's coming together but then more intrigues. Great story telling but hope it's concluded in chapter 11

Nearing the end, hope it is not too quick. 5/5

So good....loving it. 5/5

Well worth the 3 rewrites. A boat that grows? interesting concept.

Getting too long and boring