by Lore26
Pick a point of view and stick with it. Quit with the bouncing back and forth.
This switching back and forth stops the flow of the story.
Also midriff is the word you're looking for not mid-drift.
I likes both POVs! Only one suggestion... At the end where he tells her she's a good person, it reads he is looking at her; it also says she grabbed his shoulder to keep close to him... but you set this scene up with him flipping her over (so she isn't facing him). Need some clarification on the flip LOL.