All Comments on 'Duped by Niece's Husband Ch. 01'

A sister ask her sister to go out of her way to keep track of her married slut daughter? For what and why? They chase a fast car in an older car just to keep up with them when they are going to the same place? the wife pressures the husband to keep up even tho the car is unstable? They get a free suite with a free bar, why? A man walks up at dinner and says the nieces husband owned him and paid him late so he promised to bring to women for use and his wife is one of them? No prior word or consent, where has conspiracy, abduction, kidnapping gone? The man's wife appears fully nude when he gets there, is comfortable and playing with the niece's breast? She fucks and sucks multiple men with no complaint or hesitation? She us used willingly and then fucks the niece's husband while the niece fucks him. They fucked each others wife to put the DNA in them to prevent evidence for criminal charges. He drove the wife home and has nothing to do with her for at least four months? Where is the medical reports? Where are the police reports? Why is he even with the wife, it is obvious she was in on the plan and was very happy to be gangfucked? Where are the divorce papers? The leader thug, who should be dead by now, said the women are now whores. Sounds like they were before and the only one that didnt know was the husband. You have more chapters coming it seems so the women can be used as whores. This is written from the husbands perspective, if he was a man he would have already left her and filed for divorce so other chapters from his point of view are stupid. My self, I think the niece's husband would have already vanished! Poorly thought out and poorly written. Try a better more realistic plot!

you suck at it

Holy Bat Shit! You could drive trucks through those plot holes! -- I'm fairly certain I've said this once or twice, but ANY erotic tale has to have some connection to reality (no matter how tenuous). Your tale however, managed to avoid that in every way imaginable. Congratulations! Your tale is also a prime example of why ‘Authors’ write ‘outlines’ of their stories prior to writing (perhaps you were pressed for time). The 5-W’s might be of use to you next time you’re ready to unleash a tale on the world. Those being: What, Where, Who, When and most importantly, What The Fuck For AKA: Why. Best of luck in your writing.

Is this a story or just random words?

consider this erotic ? well it seems your the only one!

My Wife and I loved it!!! Very Erotic. Thanks.

and if it took you longer than that to write this crap, you're an idiot.

Biggest load of crap on the site,one of the worst stories I have ever read. It did not make sense at all, and was anything but erotic.