All Comments on 'Dweeb Ch. 01 - Imagine'

Very good start. It's the kind of story that I can like very much.

I love stories about relationships between an unpopular boy and a popular girl. I love stories about mother-son incest; but I see some shadows on the horizon that can prevent me to enjoy the story. Those shadows have names: Paul Jackson and Wilford womack.

A promising start, good luck with future posts.

Cheers, EmmSea.

Definitely needs part 2 or three... Great lead in, so many possibilities. Can't wait to see what happens.

"N-no, mister" He's 18! Come on writers of literotica, this fascination with the pathetic Brother/Son is corny.

LOL, Mano… you must have misunderstood the title: DWEEB. Charlie IS just a little bit ‘pathetic’. But, of course, pathos, the root word in pathetic, is often a necessary ingredient in stories about ordinary people. Thank you for reading. MP2 :-)

Marvelous opening. Please continue.

5*

Tc

Ps to morbid romantic, what’s a good story without some drama?

Nice start, definitely want to see what our poor star gets up to.

Thank you EmmSea, Anonymous and Morbidromantic for your kind words about Ch. 01. I hope DWEEB continues to please you. On that note, Morbid, may I just say that three-dimensional characters necessarily have shadows unless their stories are only set at exactly noon. I sincerely encourage you to keep an open mind about Paul, Wilford, and others who step into the light in DWEEB. MP2 :-)

You have a decent storyline started, However I think that you going overboard on the descriptive adjectives. For me that distracts from the flow of the narrative.

Linnear, et alia: Ch. 02, Planning, is in the approval queue. DWEEB won't end there. MP2 :-}

I enjoyed this chapter and look forward to more.

Thank you Seeker. More to, *ahem*, come. MP2 :-)

I already read chapter 5 and liked it very much so I decided to read the entire series from the beginning. I wasn't disappointed! Great and funny story to start with and it doesn't diminish the enjoyment knowing already where this is all heading to. Thank you, MishaPearl!

You’re welcome, Anonymous. Chapter 06 is working its way to you. But you should expect a delay because I have another higher priority time commitment to honor. Thank you for reading my work. MP2 :-)

Just started, like the characters so far, established the females Charles will be fucking, good pace without going too long. The only problem I had was the phone call at the very beginning needed better Grammer. Really confusing trying to realize who's saying what.

But seriously, if that's my worst complaint. This is a great start

Thank you, Anonymous. The phone call to start Ch. 10 was a scene-setting device to show Charlie interrupting a conversation in progress. I imagine he was as confused as you until Colleen appeared in the hall, pointed to her cell phone and told him that was his uncle that she had been speaking with. Glad you are liking the story! MP2 :-)

Kind of comic, so far.