All Comments on 'Dying Wish Ch. 02'

Super fucking hot though I wasn't a fan of the Javon part of the story. Five stars and a favorite point!

Not sure exactly why the detour to Javon happened, but it was still sexy. Still like how James is still thinking - somewhat - with his larger head despite the implicit invitation to mother's bedroom. 5 stars again and added to my favourites.

Good story so far ,, but the Javon part was a killer in it ,, here you putting mom as faithful yet she does that in the story,,, I understand that people look ,, but she was still cheating in doing that in front of someone that was not her husband/partner

3⭐️

The spark that ignited the taboo flame.

Almost autobiographical.

Seriously, please continue this. This is so much better than the usual porn plots, where the people just start fucking without any mentionable debate or emotional development!

Though I have to agree with other comments. While the Javon excursion was hot, and I get why you included it, I'm not entirely certain it helps further the plot in a sensible way.

He’s upset that Melissa cheated on him and then proposes to have an affair with his mother?

Seriously?

I knew the unexpected turn in this part would be tough for some people, myself included, as my original idea was for Paula to remain as pristine as she was presented in Ch 1. After reflecting on the plot and characters some more, however, especially Paula's secret notebook, it became clear to me that it made more sense for her to be a severely flawed person. The story may have began mostly about a son and wife trying to honor a man's dying wish, but now it's I'd say it's more about two vert damaged, imperfect people looking for a second chance at love.

Good going, no real suggestions (needed). Just want Bryan to go peacefully so Paula & James

have to make some quick decisions.

Yes, Paula is still hiding something. But so is James. What will Bryan take to his grave?

And, Javon wasn’t a bad inclusion…

One further thing: I’ve put my name out there as a volunteer editor, although no-one’s taken

me up on it yet. I have a degree in English, ideas on story, and 70 years of life experience. FYI

M

Great continuation of chapter 1.

5 Stars! a lot of these multi-part mother/son stories devolve to shit. Please don't let this be one of them. And by 'shit', i mean turning mommy into some kind of mega-slut, with sonny boy pimpin' for her. I think what you have so far is very sweet. Be kind always... also, yea, at least read back over your script yourself- lots of extra words left over maybe from earlier versions of the sentence. Very distracting trying to parse your meaning. Missing words, too

Hey make a threesome double penetration In future where James and javon both fuck her

Great job! Can't wait to see where this goes. I agree with the 1st part of walkindatdog's comment, but didn't see enough wrong about the grammar to care. Thanks for a great series!

You call her a slut and tell her you want answers and you need to talk, to wearing a bikini and talking about a nudist, still No answers.

Liked the story but still no incest!!! And now you quit!!! Are you going to continue or just leave us hanging?????????? gave it 4 stars

We need part 3!

I gave it a 1 star this story just seems to be adding characters and stupid plot twists. I quickly got tired of all the useless dragged out dialogue. I’m sure that the author thought they were going to grab the reader with this crap but for me it was boring. I completely lost interest in the characters and the story itself by the end of the first page.

A masterpiece is being created. No doubt about it. Here is a master story teller

Still very nice although there's no incest YET 5 stars!! Waiting on chapter 3!!!!!!!!!!

A terrific story and an exciting read. Great plot & characters. Thanks for developing this amazing story and plot. 5++ Stars. Looking forward to more.....

I went inside and noticed down the hall my parent's door was open a few inches. I simply couldn't resist sneaking a peek inside. She was on the bed naked on her back with a dildo in her hand, she was moving it back and forth in her pussy slowly. What surprised me the most was what she was saying. "Oh James, harder honey, I've wanted this for so long, fuck me James, fuck me!!"

Liked the story but still no sexual incest 4 stars

Loving this series but still no incest 4 stars