by mrjonzz88
.. . I can do, but I have already had some positive responses. I see you've written a lot yourself : x Seems lacking in character to criticize when you haven't even made an effort .
I imagine I could expound more on this material. Thanks all for the favourites. I'd never imagined this prompt of a reply...
Quite the waste of time reading this.
First off, how could he be a virgin still after taking his mother from behind.
WOW...sad
...Use that time to read a dictionary. The word is "quit", not "not quite ". Hard to take criticism from an illiterate.
Would have been a good story if you'd built the story rather than starting with the fuck, intimating a long seduction and then only regaling one massage. Surely you start with the first encounter: not seeking sex, surprise, etc, ending with the statutory fuck. Were you in a rush?