All Comments on 'Echoes 06'

It's a shame. You are obviously a very good writer but this story, that could have been great, descended into a dreadful mess.

Actually it was disgusting. He should have divorced the wife after a year of absence then found a woman who loved him. Then married with kids of his own. The relationships he had were as close to incest as you can get. Also the age gap had to be close to 30 years. Not for me.

You started off great, and then plummeted the story right into a heaping pile of shit over the next 5 chapters. What a waste.

Wow -What a ride! I’m not sure anyone could emotionally survive what you put Chase through, I know I couldn’t. In fact, the plot got too complex and had too many twists at time for me to get into it, but I couldn’t stop reading. Great writing even if the story arc struggled at times. 5*

8085 brought this story to an end in the way that I expected. Predictable insipid melodramatic cancer death, predictable evil character returning for revenge and predictable third generation incestuous relationship. I endured this whole story in the same way one finishes off watching a bad Netflix series. The show itself is crap, you get nothing from it, but you have already sunk time into it and you ride it out because you have a psychological need called completionism.

Started strong, but in the end... disappointing...

Well done author. If you can get someone to read all 6 chapters and then bitch about 5 of them being a pile of shit.... you must be doing something right. And for the dimwits that moan on here that the story should have done this or that.... how about you write your own fucking stories and stop bitching like babies that this or that should have happened.

I thought the last chapter was bad. It was far better than this one. There a lot of feeling bullshit. The plot was the cheating cunt who ran away dies, hubby fucks her mother for another 15 years. Scumbag goes to jail for a supposedly trumped up charge that is unspecified He comes back and by accident kills the woman who paid to have him framed. And the little girl grows up to fall in love and fuck him.

Not one of the mysteries you dropped during the whole series were answered. You skipped over decades. This was a waste of a story. I said before I rarely gave out a 1 if the story had decent grammar and construction. Well this no plot ending deserves nothing above a 1.

You're a good writer but DAMN!!! This story is just bad. Hope you'll write something a lot more reasonable and sensible

Just fucking awful. Chase is a weak wimp sex hound. No redeeming values.

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And OF COURSE you got him to hav3 sex with tne kid. Of course.

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That you even wrote a chapter 6 after the last one was……surprising. But then maybe not. Your mania with incest needed to be fed…so kill off Bizzy and get tne loser back with Issy….then kill off Issy and get the loser into the kids knickers. Of corse!

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Just garbage. 1 *. Go back to writing for the incest loving pervs.

Thank you. I didn’t see the ending coming but I did enjoy the journey. Keep up the great work:)

Thank you

Thank you. Didn’t see the ending but enjoyed the ride:)

No, doing the girl you raised is all wrong here... too much over the top imo.

So, ending the tale with a bit of grooming??

Plus, Elizabeth wasn't clever enough on her own, to figure out it was a setup by her "mother"?

Thanks for sharing...

Well, The first three or four chapters where digestible even entertaining, however these last two are beyond my comprehension. Why bother?

Not a bad story a bit drawn out but then end yuck, to reminiscent of that pervert Woody Allen.

Well… not sure wtf I just read, but it was something. I mean, started out on a high in part 1 and hit rock bottom here. You didn’t label it incest so I knew not to read so f u for that. One day I’m going to figure out why I can’t just give up on shit series

I read the story in the AM and decided to wait to comment, well it is now in the PM and here I go.

8085, it was an interesting tale from start to finish, maybe not my cup of tea (I don't like tea) but interesting.

Now I would like to address some of the comments (even though they will never se this). This was not an incest story, the only person Chase was related to was Bizzy. Belly was her aunt and Chavelle was the daughter of Izzy and Shane.

Yes there was gaps between the ages about 23 between Chase and Belly and 24 between chase and Chavelle, again not my cup of tea but you don't see all the complaining when it's some old man and some younger girl on here.

8085, best of luck on your next story.

I can't believe the assholes below . It was timid compared to many . And beautiful all the way through . Well done .

Buzzy allowed back into his life? Not a chance. And bringing the physical manifestation of her betrayal? Really way over the plausibility level. Belly constructing the betrayal and somehow still getting back into his life? There really were just too many things happening here that could absolutely never happen. Him fucking Chavell is probably the most probable occurrence in the whole stupid story.

Amygdala

I guess you didn't read the story. Some others as well. There is no incest in this story. Chase simply fucks 3 generations of a family of women. CHASE WAS NOT CHAVELL'S FATHER!!!!

Wow, full circle! I actually liked the story with all its crazy turns and flips. It has flaws, of course, but all can be overlooked for story flow. Chase getting the kid was a serious stretch of the imagination but it was nice to see the sad sack win one.

I see we have no incest fans this should have been in incest your score would have been higher the story is ok

When I finished Echoes 05 I commented that I felt life for little Chavelle was going to be problematic. Okay, not quite that way but I was worried that having Isabella and Chase as role models she was going to be one messed up girl. Dear god, how right I was. Please put an end to this story line. If you do add one more I will take a pass.

Well, this happened. As a twisted tale, it works well. As far as suspending disbelief, it's a Saddletramp story. You have to ignore a lot to buy into it. So 4 stars, not 5.

An unexpected ending. There were points where I agree with the best comment, like why didn't he see that birthmark for a year. I also hate the stupid comments from the LW people that can't read the story. I can get past plot holes, because my stories are full of them, if I'm engaged. You have done something different in LW. Did I like it? Sort of. But well written so you get a 5.

I think it is a testament to your skills as a writer that the recycling of common tropes gets you this response. I enjoyed the story but I found the “daughter-father” relationship a bit creepy…

Wow, What a rollercoaster! What emotion! A fine tapestry woven for us to behold.

Well, this was definetly something, i will be honest I feel conflinted in the way Chase went through three generations there, specially since he was raising Chavelle but damn if it wasn't an interesting twist. Thanks fro the read.

Interesting twist with a happy ending

Amazing writing and imagination

A lot of taboo but no incest in actuality .... Because out of 3 no woman was blood relative of Chase

Keep it up

What a twisted , convoluted tale you have here. I have mixed feelings about it, but you can definitely tell a story. Hope Chavelle lasts longer than Bizzy and Belly.

I saw the first twist the 2 3 and fourth well not a clue. I have mixed feelings on the story. Fantastic writing none the less. Great job.

I didn't see THAT ending coming!

Really great writing. This was the first of your stories I've read; now going to read another one.

Wanting to read another one - isn't that the best compliment of all?

5/5!

I'm a 68 year old guy , been reading stories here for years , and this one got to me . I will admit I had tears at the end , very real story line and well written .

Don't quite know what to make of this story. Having relations with grandma, ma, daughter? Although he was not a blood relative of any of them. I will have to contemplate this story for a while. However it is well written with enough twists in the story. I figured Bizzy would return and a relationship Isabella would happen but not the other twists that developed. WELL DONE 5 stars

Maybe this is just me being a pervert, but I knew when he admitted to never treating this girl as his daughter that it would end with them together. I didn't see Granny dieing violently but I did see her dieing so her mare, that she groomed, would take over.

That woman was pretty ruthless, so I can totally see her grooming a child for the man she loves.

The author does a Literotica version of Oedipus Rex. Crazy. Love it.

This turned into an adult comic two or three chapters ago.

Didn't care about the characters, but definitely wanted to see where 80085 went with this mess😅.

I'm happy Bizzy ' daughter didn't have a dog.

We didn't have to suffer Chase fucking that too☺️.

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P.S. Remembered I did not read this chapter the first time. Back when I had good sense 😢.

Bedknobs and blowjobs? Well sure. Helluva title. No question a huge hit.

Apparently, you were trying to see how badly you could piss us off and still make us like the story. It may be you went to the well once too often but I will continue to read.

Well, a lot of pervs fantasize about having both a mother and her daughter (not that I ever :)) but three generations? Damn sure a long and winding road but yeah, I think you stuck the landing. Very weird and complicated story... but impressive.

This is one of the best stories on this site. Usually, I'm not one for reconcilation after something like what Elizabeth and Isabella did, but the way you wrote the story was amazing.

Good story until he took 2 years to see the micky mouse birth mark. Lost me at that point.

Damn you, asshole.

Why did you have to kill Isabella?

I hated her at first, then grew to love her character.

Damn you

Glad I went on this journey you wrote.

i hate sad fucking stories. 1*

You know, sometimes the comments are stupid. Where the hell is the incest? There is no incest . Bizzy was his wife, Iszzy was his mother-in-law, and Chavelle was not his, no relaxation:-). Shane and Bizzy were her parents. The fact that Chase raised her had no baring on their blood lines. The fact that he got to fuck three generations of the same blood is amazing, but concievable, and there is no incest. None of his blood was in any of the women, and he could have breed them all, safely. Why don't people read the story? Now, great story line. Did drag in places, but well done. Keep writing.

XYZ

Good writing, demented story.

Great Writing. But I'm not liking the story sorry. But THANKS.

This story was really well done. I do not understand all of the hateful comments, but I notice that they got fewer as the story went on. I think a lot of these people were skimming, so they couldn't feel the emotion that flowed between the characters. To take a story into territory this dark and still bring it back to the light takes a lot of skill. I think it was one of the very best stories I've seen here. Great job!

Sincerely grotesque. A good writer that probably needs therapy.

Probably.... Hell it's a certainty.

Alright! So when do we kill off the third one?

Ha! Knew when he said that he had never seen her as a daughter that he would end up fucking her! Good story; imaginative and entertaining as hell! The plot was consistent and the characters well-drawn, the pace was just right, and just a really good read. Loved it!

O...kay...

Twighlight zone. The guy got breaks and couldn't catch a break at the same time.

WTF! So he lets the cheating crazy wife back into his life and lets her pawn off her child with Shane onto him? He lets that conniving evil stepmother back in? He doesn't tell the crazy wife her mother was behind all of this?

Gross. Isabella conspired to set up Elizabeth. But he takes her back. At least he knew his wife had been betrayed and set up. But never told her. And then it goes off the rails entirely. Wish I never got past first chapter. Gah!

That is a very convoluted and complex story full of emotion. Great story. Thanks.

Yeah this is pretty messed up and he should not of allowed the slut back into his life especially after what she did

Круговорот блядей в природе и в голове автора.

Well that was all a bit of a wet drizzle of creepy abuse hidden behind closed doors.

Correct me if I'm wrong but genetic based cancers run in families and the likelihood is that Isabelle would also be a gene carrier, so how did she manage to avoid it. I'd also be really surprised if Chevelle isn't also a carrier, and doomed to die.

On subject matter alone I'd almost wonder if this was written by Woody Allen, if it wasn't for the lack of style.

So it was all an incels dream in his basement after passing out from a lack of decent food and too much caffeinated sugary ones, while playing some lame ass game.

As that's the only way this makes sense, a sort of Jacobs ladder style flash of what could have been but wasn't, because he was dying in a hyperglycaemic coma.

a commenter mentioned the chance of cancer being genetically passed on ,especially after the mother and grandmother both had it ?? at the very least if it's one that can be carried and passed on genetic testing should be the next step .

Well damn!! That was one fine tale. Well written. Great flow and continuity. Thank you!

Color me surprised.

Didn’t see that coming

Well done… I think