All Comments on 'Eco-"Friendly" Cleaning'

A very difficult read. Dark squared. But oh so well done.

The hero is just too perfect and yet committed every selfish act of cheating that his wife did. I didn’t like his character. I didn’t understand why the women all adored him.

Quit making me cry!

Damn, I mean damn.. Emotional masterpiece. Got me in the heart. This one hurt so much because it felt so real and immediate. Echo the post before me. Congrats. But damn.

Second time for me already gave it a five. Well written believable story. Also incredibly sad.

Shit!

It was a very good story. Avery sad ending though.

Very well written and a very good story.

This writing is trash, the characters aren't believable. 1 star

Well written, moving particularly at the end. Very sad ending

Difficult all the way through but consistent.

Some of the comments here crack me up. This is an amazing story (yes it's sad but still amazing) by one of the site's best authors.

This character will live with what he did to destroy his wife/ex wife for the rest of his life. All because he could never forgive. And this was a woman who was the true love of his life.

Haha. True love?!?! Dumb ass cuck unMisTakenIdentity eating out sloppy seconds to forgiveness and "true love"? Is this your true love?

TRUE LOVE beaten by BUSINESS SAVVY and PRIDE? How weak is your level of true love?

Westerners and their moronic education. TRUE is infallible, absolute and unquestionable. Stop jacking off to cuck porn for a year. Stop that wimp cock of yours from stealing all the blood from that pea-sized brain long enough to ponder over the epiphany of the moronic nuances of your stupid statement.

Geezus C. Christ!

An amazingly well written story. Can't say I enjoyed what it was about but that in no way detracts from how well the story itself was written.

Great story, but I do not understand what the ending was. Not at all.

Even when you do some kind of revenge, it's cucky.

Great story except the ending. I don't understand why he did it? He could have just bring her home with him to spend the rest of her life in peace.

Excellent work with an emotional ending

Ending alone acquired 5*

For it's heart touching sad conclusion

Wow

This guy has a gifted insight into human nature.

Dark. Midnight dark. Midnight in a coal mine dark. Damn well told, and so very dark.

Fuck fuck fuck. So dark but so good at the same time. No winner here not a one.

Fucking pathetic ending. Forgiveness is so overrated. Why do that to yourself? Someone who betrays and disrespects you in that content deserves no mercy...

That was grim very grim

I appreciated this story. It made me cry. You’re a good writer, really. I’m sorry you don’t write anymore. Thanks for writing and sharing. i’ve read several of your stories. This is the second one that made me cry. MHaiCS

Bloody good story with some realism showing what cheating can cause to a marriage and how it affects the involved. Not every marriage will react this way, but Brenda might have loved him very much truly, but was simply stupid and also careless. She might have gotten used to the love of her husband, taking it for granted.

So, after she lost everything, only then she realized what she has lost, and the cost of her unfaithfulness.

The husband suffered cuz, well, it makes you think if your wife truly ever loved you. Even if she cheated, it's hard to lose the love you felt for that person over a long time. Love can be something great, but also quite vicious this way. Heartbreak can be quite potent at ruining people's mind and body.

Well, anyways, great story with some emotions stuff.

Damn, that was rough, esp the end.

I guess that means you did a good job.

So, good job.

Wow, now that is a story. I'm writing with tears running down my face. Powerful and emotional round house to the head. Amazing portrait of the pain involved in this kind of marital betrayal. Thank you for this.

Ok. I understand the wife got “ carried away” with her business. But giving her ass away like it was a party favor, didn’t make any sense. There was another story on Lit, where the wife and her friend, got a job at a motel. They gradually started prostituting themselves, to make quick cash. The husband is clued in, and he tips he cops. Every body is arrested. He gets custody of the kid. She gets out, and moves out west, where she opens a legal whorehouse. And comes back for her kids graduation, but tells him never to visit her. SHE at least realized she was a whore, and was in love with the $$$$. This happens, to a lot of women, especially those who grew up poor. Wifey, in this story, was a whore. She was all about the money. It was unfortunate for her, she never admitted it to herself, and moved on with her life. Everyone, would have been happier.

Wow, that was some ending.

Holy shit I was not ready for that ending. I'm genuinely heartbroken. Why'd you do this to me? I'm just trying to wank, not cry.

I've read many of your works, and being honest this wasn't up to par. Yes, your writing style is still good, but this story was full of rage and hate. I didn't see the point, because not only did no one win, or learn anything, but, the man became a murderer, and went on his way home to find comfort for the monster he had become. Just not a good story.

Second time that I have read this story, and the dust in the air got in my eyes again as I read the ending.

What is interesting in the story is how they move through the various stages of betrayal, anger and grief. Their reconciliation at the end is short and what I felt was real. I feel for Jenny though, he would need to be honest with her at some point or he would be as guilty as Brenda.

I liked this one :)

Wow, I am a bit torn by the whole "I never ment to hurt/betray/destroy you" bullshit and his instantly homicidal reaction but maybe i am mellowing in age but great storyline, well written. I think because i enjoyed it that much added detail would be nice could be an interesting ending if her forgiveness was false as well and his murder/euthenasia was live fed directly to the police or someone to blackmail him perhaps...

Gripping, heartbreaking, uplifting .... all in one. I don't care about moralizing bullshit, , an invredibley good story. 5*

Very well written. Thanks.

Do we ever know why she was dying? Assume cancer.

5/5

Nato_

"You deserve more." - Actually, no. When he sent her away, he forbade her to even see her family. I don't know if her parents are still alive, but he stole 10 years with their daughter from them.

Fifth promise, don't blend clening products.

It made me very angry.

Too many negative waves man. Thanks for sharing your work.

Forgive himself for what? All those hoes deserved it. And he should have told that bitch to shove it when she called him. What is all this victim nonsense? She knew what she was doing and deserves every bit of misery in her life

Powerful ending.

The ending was a little too short for me personally. I liked it and the overall narrative, but it plays out like a tragedy and the best tragedies still end with a sunrise, the ending seemed to be quite a few paragraphs short. Without the sunrise and hope at the end it played more like a dirge. But that's just me man, still loved it, probably why the last bite was hard to swallow. Thanks for writing it

I like your writing and generally enjoy your stories. This one was a bit much for me. Using Gail all those months (a little maybe, but all those months?) and then the murder at the end just went beyond what was acceptable to me, but not to others, I'm sure. Thanks for your time and talent in bringing your stories to life.

The MC is very unlikable for many reasons but I'll just go with this one since it's a reoccurring thing in your stories. Why did the MC get mad when Gail brought up the FACT that he settled? You clearly went out of your way to point that out. Also, murder, really?

Nothing lijeable. Not in the charactors, not in the story.

WOW , a very hard story to read but well worth it .

The MC was way over the top in his revenge. Wifey was not trying to hurt him, obviously she never spent the ill gotten gains bu was saving up for her planned on famiy. Her biggest mistake was letting the dipshit take her in the ass. No heroes in this story, juat an uncompromising haqteful hateful guy who could have came to a good business decision.

Poor Brenda. I know her love out weighed her betrayal. and the depth of that love could have MAYBE led to reconciliation, but it was giving her ass to other men, while denying her husband, that made it impossible. I cant help feeling bad. She lost everything and lived in misery before begging the man she loved to kill her.

When this was posted, I was 18, graduating high school in May, and full of righteous anger. I know I read this and loved that the “whore got what she deserved!” The best friend got his ass pounded too? Hell yeah!

But now… I’ve gotten soft in my old age. I feel very sorry for Brenda. Such a waste of a life and of a true love. Both MC and Brenda did it to themselves and to each other. The saddest thing, going back over the story, is that she didn’t need to make this a super high paying job. She and her cleaners could have made a modest amount and gone on to happy, undisturbed lives.

Painful. No winners. Realization too late.

Dave had no soul. He will be disappointed if there's a heaven and hell. I understand why he was in so much pain however he destroyed his own soul with residual hatred. Brenda deserved some hatred but I pity Dave's kids as he has worthless emotional health. Near the end i was hoping that someone out of the past would catch him is a dark alley and beat him senseless.... This M/C was a perfect construct for the commentators that rail any ending but total annihilation.

5 fucking pages of the cheating sluts and Brenda's whoring business.

Cuck writer fucked up Dave's character. 2*

Great story but I hated the mc, understood him but that didnt justify for me the way he treated her or her partner. 5* for the the story writing but not for the brutality.

Wow……wow. 5 stars.

That was dark and sad and beautiful. Great story

Reread this. TTT, you are one fine writer, that ending was a 10 star.