All Comments on 'Elizabeth, Happy at Last Ch. 02'

I CAN FULLY UNDERSTAND WHY THIS TOOK SO LONG FOR YOU TO COMPLETE, YOU MUST HAVE ONLY STAYED AWAKE ABOUT 15 MINUTES AT A TIME. I DON'T MEAN TO BE OVERLY HARSH BECAUSE I UNDERSTAND THE COMMITMENT THAT GOES INTO PRODUCING A STORY LIKE THIS, BUT AT SOME POINT "HER FATHER" SHOULD HAVE QUALIFIED FOR SOME OTHER NAME REFERENCE. I CERTAINLY COULD HAVE ENDURED NOT KNOWING EVERY DETAIL OF THEIR DAY TO DAY LIFE. I AM SURPRISED THAT YOU OMITTED TELLING US ABOUT HOW THEY PULLED PAPER FROM THE ROLL TO WIPE EACH TIME THEY POOPED, INCLUDING HOW THEY HUNG THE ROLL IN THE DISPENSER. I MEAN EXPLAINING TO ME HOW AND WHEN THEY UNPACKED EACH PARCEL AND BOX AND THE THOUGHT PROCESS THAT ACCOMPANIED THEIR DECISIONS ON WHERE TO PLACE ITEMS ADDED NOTHING TO THE STORY FOR ME. IT SEEMED TO ME THAT LOVE WAS NEARLY ABSENT FROM THEIR RELATIONSHIP AND THE EASE WITH WHICH THEY FELL INTO SEX WITH EVERY NEW ACQUAINTANCE THEY MADE SEEMED TO EMPHASIZE THAT. IT CAME TO SEEM THAT THE ONLY REASON THEY COUPLED WAS BECAUSE THEY WERE CONVENIENTLY ALREADY UNCLOTHED. I ALSO COULDN'T UNDERSTAND THE SEEMING NEED TO SHARE THEIR PARENT/CHILD RELATIONSHIP WITH SO MANY CASUAL ACQUAINTANCES. ONE FINAL DIG AND MY SPLEEN WILL BE VENTED. THE SEX WAS AS BLAND AS IT COULD POSSIBLY BE. HAVING BORING SEX DOZENS OF TIMES DOES NOT QUALIFY AS EROTICISM. PLEASE ATTEMPT TO FIND SOME WAY TO HUMANIZE YOUR SUBJECTS RATHER THAN INFLICTING UPON ME MUNDANE EXPLANATIONS OF WHERE THEY PARKED THEIR CARS AND WHY. BUT NONETHELESS, THANKS FOR WHAT WOULD HAVE BEEN FOR ME A MINDBREAKING EFFORT.