All Comments on 'Emma and Becs Pt. 01'

Incredibly detailed scenes. Such sexy writing. Loved it!

Love the details!! I want more!! I was sad that it was over.

Thank you for your submission

Thank you for your story it has promise. I found writing weights and heights as 5 foot 7 detracted from the story you are writing a story so you need to spell out the heights and weights. Also placing things like (ish) again detracts from the story first because 'ish' is not a word and second because this is a story and brackets don't belong in literature.

Just one final point at the end of your interesting introduction you wrote 'emma and becs' where it should have been Emma and Becs. You then followed this with ............. This is a common mistake it should only be three dots or periods such as ... this is referred in grammar as the triple ellipses.

Apologies for sounding abrupt I do not mean to be rude because I found your story rather erotic and I like your descriptions. Looking forward to your next installment.