All Comments on 'Enamored with Effervescent Emily'

Very predictable, sexy for sure but equally boring in a way too.

Does this girl never have periods?

Silly and rather mawkish ending.

Loved it, great writing, pacing and development.

I thought the ending was very sweet and i would love to see a sequale. Maybe they reveale the truth to their children or something? Just a thought

it was one of the best love stories i've read in a while. if i could give more than 5 stars, i would!

"shear" is to remove wool from sheep; "sheer" is translucent or see-through

Really good story. Hope you write more.

Why the long buildup, only to follow with vanilla sex? The pregnancy was predictable, and so was the mother finding out. It should have been shorter and more descriptive.

Living in close quarters with family there is little privacy. There is a very good chance of one getting caught undressed or masturbating. Many families have discarded convention and have been helping each other.

I really enjoyed your erotic love story.

''''out of the number of times the author used any form of "moan". Kind of annoying.

One of the hottest stories I have ever read! Seriously, very well done!

It was great right up to her getting pregnant! Went from 5 stars to 2.

Awesome story until you completely killed it with a pregnancy. Two stars gone right there.

Amazing story well written and so believable. It was sexy erotic and a turn on from start to finish I was hard all the way thru reading it.

I have never done a five star before. It is a common place for me to give a three and maybe a four. There was something about your story and how you brought it along that captured me. Well done.

Very hot story. You are an excellent writer.

Absolutely loved loved loved it. I fell in love with Emily myself. Well written!

the rate of abnormal is just slightly higher than the national average. So, very low. Very good story, but I can't stand anal in these stories. Save those for your gay stories author

Great story overall, well written. The characters are compelling and the scenes have just the dmright amount of detail!

I like how both characters are attentive to the other and never forceful, made your story even more compelling.

thanks

I really enjoyed this story. Thank you.

One thing...I noticed multiple places where the word 'while' was used in place of 'well' and a few 'then' instead of 'than' - minor details but proofreading might have caught them. Just a suggestion, your writing is very good overall.

Easily the best story I have read on lit, no question.

First read

A very sweet loving story. I can't think of anything missing right now or anything wrong.

a little fleshing out the story in some parts (mom discovering her kids before she dies, that's always intriguing to me).

def. bookmark it and maybe favorite it when 2nd and 3rd read happen. 5 Stars right now :) keep writing I like your style

Did the agency do a background check, and miss the fact that a brother and sister, with a biological child of their own wanted to adopt a child, or did the investigation uncover that, and since you lived in California, no one cared?

Automatic 3 star. I'm not gay. THAN!!! is spelled with an "A" not an e.

As I write this lockdown very much continues in America and yet the story carrys on into the future. And that future appears rushed here, scabbed on almost, like an afterthought, but at least this future looks brighter than real life.

There were a few grammatical errors, plus 'while' used where 'well' fitted - I did wonder if it was some sort of attempt at an accent through phonetic pronunciation.

Lexi

Everyone here enjoys reading incest porn...but grammar errors send them over the edge...lol

great story. but, research shows that unless the family has a recurring defect, the chances of a baby being born with problems is the same if not less than non family offspring.

Great character development and very god story pace ... excellent erotic tension😛.

I loved this story... all except the preggers thing.

Thanks for sharing with us.

Fabulous story! Thanks for sharing.

Very believable, fun to read, I enjoyed the romantic ending

This is probably my favorite story from you. Just wow, so much emotion, so much passion! Sexy times were hot as fuck and sweet times were cavity enducing. <3

Great story. Would love a sequel

The ending made the story

A good story with a complete ending.

A solid 4 🌟

Bill S.

I really enjoyed this story. A nice mix of romance, lust, sex, love, and some silly fun.

It was really good, but you rather over did it with the number of times you used Emily when you could have used she or similar.

Too many Emily's just spoilt the flow of the story - well for me it did.

Rapier

The second story of yours that mentioned the bathroom door swelling and sticking due to steam. Not something that happens very often in properly installed doors.

I had bookmarked this story and was glad I came back to it. It was sweet and sexy. I was right along with them as they enjoyed their firsts and their fun. The 'guilt-free' resolution with mom at the end was almost too easy, though.

One mechanical comment though was that most 'sections' or scenes or events were separated by the five star break (which you earned 5 stars BTW), except the first one where you ended it with 'end part 1' and started 'Part 2 a new routine.' I would have preferred it, if you had done that for each section giving us a preview of the thought.