All Comments on 'Enchanted Ch. 01'

Hope you enjoyed the first part of this story! There's more coming on Lit and even more to be found if you check out my profile. In fact, Enchanted is turning out to be more than I ever expected and I'm almost finished with book 1 at the time of this comment. I'm thinking it will turn into at least 2 books, if not 3.

An interesting first chapter, looking forward to being drawn deeper into this mysterious world

bravo. will keep reading.

Great opening to this yarn but dearie me so many words left out or misused they became a distraction. 5vstars just the same. I’m a forgiving type.

This is like some transmigrated isekai trope. Are we going to see status screens next?

1 star because this isn’t a chapter but a long paragraph at best. We have no idea what’s going on and nothing happened to indicate what type of story it will be. I think you should have held several of your so called chapters back and published them in one hit.

Also from a writing perspective, tiny releases mean that you can’t go back and change anything. Say a few pages later you need that woman to be a bit taller or something then it’s too late as you’ve published her height and now that’s canon.

Still 1 star because I’m not being tricked into giving good ratings only for the story to turn out shit.