All Comments on 'Enchanted Ch. 12'

Great chapter. I am looking forward to more of comes out of your brain. Thanks for your time and your imagination. 5 stars!

Was good, until you killed off little red.

Nothing personal, but I'm dropping this after little red's death. Was looking forward to reading more.

I think Little Red’s death was a great choice from a story perspective. It adds depth that was sorely lacking before that. Am I saddened? Absolutely. But I’m much more invested now as well. Good job.

I think it's the opposite. Perhaps if this were novel format I might agree so I see where you're coming from. However killing off seemingly important characters after only being introduced not long before makes everything feel flimsy and unimportant. I could no longer invest in any of the characters.

Seems your readers and I would enjoy you bringing Little Red back. I bet John could do it, maybe she could work for Beytrixxa, and imagine the power Bey would get from

Red causing so many men to orgasm.

i think little reds death was good, dramatically, i know all the horny on main group want her, but i do agree that her death should mean something, this is almost throwaway, what i mean by that is killing a character can be good, it develops stakes, allows a protagonist to grow, shows the world isn't some fairy tell cartoon, give this a bit of a dark fantasy vibe, it probably helps that i'm reading this after its finished like an actual short story/novel, vs a weekly jerk session, but if this was a book, id buy and read it, i mean the spelling and grammar mistakes would have to be fixed, but editing you know. tbh im enjoying this more as a book/novel then as erotica lol

Not your best chapter