by roughboy18
I love your dedication and the effort you put in to churning out exceptional work, for free, to the masses who devour your literary entrees. I love you and your work, however this addition felt rushed and not up to the quality standards that I am use to from you. I feel like you rushed this one a bit to staunch the flow of whining from the last chapter.
There were a couple of grammatical errors, such as on s/b one and huge whole (I actually laughed at that one and that distracted me for the remainder of the story) and some spacing issues that I haven't noticed before in previous submissions.
I liked the plot twist of how you allowed Jon and Mel to grow and that someone else could see their inner and outer strengths beyond the current set of circumstances. This chapter reminded me of the Heat and MIB.
Your work is exceptional and always a notch higher than most. Eagerly waiting for the next update.