All Comments on 'End Around'

Beautiful story, the work of a truly great author. This was great for so many different reason, A great story, but it is the character development, and the fabulous dialogue that sets it apart.

5 incredible stars, I wish it could be more.

Cagivagurl

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Too late for him to talk to her. No need. That's what lawyers are for.

Finish it tomorrow. Falling asleep.

Excelente, cinco estrellas para ti.

Randi, Excellent writing as always. I'm not sure if he could have made peace with his ex that quickly. It was 3 - 4 years, but what she did was devastating. I would suggest including the English translations when you use another language.

I loved the part where he met Pia. In order to think what a smart little girl would say, you must have a smart little girl inside.

Ending could of been better but the story was good, I HOPE YOU DUMB BITCHES READ THE STORY AND SEE ALL THE THINGS THAT YOU WILL MISS FOR BEING SELFISH HOES. An for you fuckers better yourself so this stupid hoes will respect you

We have to be careful that the great ideas we have don't bite us in thee butt!

5

I gave this story top marks. Was not so interested in the details of his retirement home, but didn't take anything away from the story.

That was a nice story, but the ending was disappointing. Why? Because of this:

"I need you to forgive me."

That sentence alone showed that Collins hadn't changed, and was still an arrogant narcissist. It was all about what she needed, and not about her husband at all. Shit.. she didn't even ask nicely or say please!

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Forgiveness is a lot like respect. For either to truly mean anything, they have to be earned. Collins did absolutely nothing to earn any forgiveness. There was no atonement for the appalling disrespect she showed him by fucking other guys and destroying their marriage. It seemed to me that she only regretted it now, because she ended up miserable and alone.

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Nita's comment about Collins not admiring his "intransigence" spoke volumes too. If Collins had really had a change of heart about her mid-life crisis, she would've said that she respected Barnes for his integrity and realised how deeply wrong she was about everything. She fucked other men and expected him to be a happy little cuck. The real irony here, is that if he'd gone along with what she wanted, Collins would've lost even more respect for him... and they still would've ended up divorced.

Well written, warm and fuzzy. P and the daughters were delightful; I only have sons and this makes me feel like I missed out. Thank you.

Very nicely done. Well written.

Good story. But why in stories like this does the wife always think a normal non sharing husband will accept her fucking around and then accept her going back to him as if nothing happened?

What a wonderful story. Thank you very much.

You outdid yourself with this one, l guess that’s why you are in my top 10 authors.

I so look forward to your next story, please don’t make us wait for too long

Scores 5/5

The obvious thing is women get to a certain age and think that screwing around is fine.

Are women that stupid?.

Asking for a friend.

Absolutely loved it! Beautifully written, great plot, great dialogs, excellent character development. Please keep writing!

Nice job enjoyed

Best story this year. Five stars.

Yet another amazing story. Your ability to set a.scene is amazing, you make me.want to travel to Mexico. The story line was perfect and I it had the requisite Yeet. 5 stars

Enjoyed the story. I have always liked your "Tell it like it is" style and I can relate well with it. If you don't like the terms the Marriage Vows, don't take them. The story line well told with good character development and good flow. Thank you for sharing it with us. Look forward to the next peak into your imagination.

You hit this one out of the ballpark. Creative, clever, painful, and loving. I'm so very glad i read this and I feel i need to thank you for it.

Great story, wonderfully written and a good story line! 5*

good story - didn't like the spanish in the story

An exceptional story but I never expect anything else from you I love a happy ending.

Awesome story , I gave it 5 big stars. I am a fan of btb stories and ones that don't cause the hubs to loose his respectability. This was one of those, my friend Saddletramp writes a few of those and I enjoy them. I am going to go through and read many of yours to get a complete read on you.

It is a gift when Randi drops a story, thank you.

somewhere east of Omaha

Great Story!

What a way to start the day.

Damn, you’re good! 5*

Apart from Collins being almost unbelievably self-centered for a woman that a man who loved her as well as two children, this is a very compelling read. I could almost understand her wanting more excitement after many years of marriage, but actually dating and sleeping around by his back while they were separated and she claimed she wanted to work things out? Oh, hell no. I guess he had no choice to allow her to visit over Christmas, but I never would have said the words "I forgive you" after the blew up their marriage and drove a huge rift between their daughters in the process. To even have such a conniving, brain-dead woman anywhere near his second, far better wife, is frankly, well, walking a tightrope for no reason. Still, all in, It was a great story.

You are on a different level. Reading the stories posted here every day, it's obvious. You know how to write, tell a story, create scenery, characters that feel like people I know. The better writers can do that, and you do it best. I wish I could give more than five stars.

So glad Barnes stuck to his beliefs, divorced Collins, and moved on with his life. Something that I think a lot of people tend to forget is that you can never change how someone feels. Whether you agree or not. You did a good job of bringing that out in your story. Barnes got it that what Collins was feeling was something he could never accept and there was no changing the way she felt. Just like Barnes feeling that he couldn't accept what she wanted in their marriage was a feeling that would never change.

Good story please do reconciliation story

Nice story, people are stupid more times than one imagine and tossing a match on relationships happen, she was dumb paid the consequences

This was a well crafted story. The beginning was the way a break down in a loving marriage should be. Barnes clearly gave Collins the chance to stay faithful. You clearly showed that divorce was to only solution for Barnes because he was a man of honour and integrity. And a one woman man. I loved how you introduced both Nita and Pia. They were the perfect fit for Barnes and you showed how truly amazing Barnes and Nita's love grew. And the need for Pia to have a loving and caring father. I really enjoyed the differing points of view of Silvia and Beck. Thank you for this gift. K

Wow...it totally captured my mind and I couldn't put it down. Felt more like a romance but that's what made it special. Loved how you wove Pia into his heart. Thanks so much. 10*

This is the type of LW story I like to read, it is emotional and people are hurt but then move on. I really believe living a good life is the best "revenge", even though in this story there is no real revenge the wife has to live with the consequences of what she has done. 5*

This story has well-evoked characters and settings. I have to ask, however, where is the drama in the Nita part of the story? A Romance needs obstacles.

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Fine story, good story; it had a beginning, good build-up, good ending. Perfect grammar and editing; so what's the problem? MY problem is with realism- how it relates to real life. Sure, we had the cheating wife, but other than here on 'Loving Wives' is it possible for a woman to take a chance on losing her husband and the respect of her daughters just to experience some new thrills?? And we had the spat between the 2 daughters over their mom's 'fling', but other than those, who else is so rich they can retire at 49, and so blessed they find the most beautiful (and also rich) woman in all of Mexico? They fall madly in love, her with the hottest body and he with the overly large package. The perfect daughters, the perfect locations, the perfect lives, all in a Mexico that is reported to be suffering from gangs and cartels killing each other, along with kidnapping rich gringos. Of course, I've never been there, so....

I do like these hybrid stories.

A most enjoyable eventually

Very, Very good, Randi! Loved it!

l enjoy how you put a version of yourself in your stories. lt's good to see the world through another's eyes. Thanks for the 'yeet'

Certainly, a well written story, To perfect for my taste and more a fantasy than real life. The story lacked real human emotions.

Thank you for the hard work you put in to give us the enjoyment it brings. The husband coming home to find his wife in the LBD is one of my favorite plot lines and you did it justice. Enjoy your accolades you earned them.

Thank you for writing such a lovely story. You are a gifted storyteller, so much so that I didn't want the story to end.

Nice story, BR. Actually it could have been two stories- before Mexico and after Mexico. I have to admit the “before Mexico” part kinda freaked me a bit. The dialogue was exactly the way I would have reacted in the “honey we need to talk” situation. Your comprehension of how a devoted, long term, husband would feel/think/react was dead on!

The second half gave us a nice adventure and resolution to his dilemma. Very well done. Thank you.

really great. 5⭐

a separation, a divorce without a fight, then everyone goes on with their own lives.

Barnes finally finds an identical woman (intelligent, independent, strong) but also completely different. Both physically and mentally.

Is she prettier, richer, more sexual...whatever, it's not a contest. She is quite simply the one with whom he will open a new chapter in his life.

I always loved your work. You delete my comment if this is inappropriate. Your projection seems so disrespecting a good and honourable man by giving his wife a choice to even being with him in ceremonies. Any loving wife will never disrespect, making him inadequate, making him suffer in heartache and saying him she love him. She just wants his security and but also want to be promiscuous which is not a wife and it's just a concubine. I know the story is dramatic, but it failed a real life logic. No honourable man who will want to do anything with an evil skank. This is is the only reason American men are searching women outside of the country. I'm sorry my comment hurts, but it's a uncomfortable truth. Thanks..

Comfy. Hubby gets temporarily discomfited, the daughters get new (and very successful) careers, Mexico gets gentrified, and everyone ends up very comfortable. A nice time is had by all!

LWlurker

Wow... this is simply an awesome tale. Thank you very, very much.

This is a variant of an oft-told tale in LW. In the hands of a less-talented author, it would feel “old.” Randi always manages to write an intriguing story, with engaging characters. And, yes, there was a Yeet.

A five story. I question the forgiveness. I doubt I could ever do that. I guess it helps that he had a storybook ending to it all. Someone who does that to a person that they say they love hollows out the past. Because she wasn't ever who he believed she was. And, when you do that to someone, it's very difficult to recover, or to trust. You can't put yourself in another person's mind. You kinda have to take their word. So the next person who comes along - can he take her word? That's why it's unforgivable. D

Good story. Feels a little unfinished, but we all have that problem. No matter where you cut it off, it's always too soon or too much for some.

I like your approach to this type of story. This was a wonderful tale of second chances. Thank you.

OUTSTANDING

easily your best story since Vagabonds

pretty good story, but the ending knocked it down 1*

Wonderful, well written story. Thank you so much!

One of your best. Truly shows you are an artist.

The only missing part was the guards, guns and paying off the cartel,

Not sure how realistic the ending is, but good story. Never understood why women like Collins believe they are entitled to whatever they want and as long as they say the feel love for their spouse. Somehow they are deluded enough to think that makes every terrible thing they do OK. She was a selfish and evil person. That is why the ending was tough for me. If she dated and fucked before they were divorced, I'm not convinced she wouldn't have just kept on going and gotten over her husband dumping her. I think she had a need to feel morally superior to Barnes so admitting anything, even later doesn't jive for me. Glad you created him to be the guy that didn't put up with bullshit or take her back after she crossed the line so blatantly. The daughters having different opinions was spot on. Thanks for writing!

You took a common trope and made it yours. Great read.

Hooked

As usual with this author, excellent story.

This is it. Good story. Believable enough.

Excellent writing

And zero tolerance for cheating and springing "the open relationship" bullshit.

And as a result Collins is going to spend the rest of her life either alone because nobody else will measure up to Barnes.

Or she'll settle for some other man and always wish she hadn't.

Sad way to spend Golden years after 25 good years with the best man you've ever known. Who you threw away for more "excitement".

In the real world actions have consequences. And her daughters now live a thousand miles away in Mexico with her ex-husband (that she still loves) and his new wife and family.

That’s a fun story! I wanted to choke Collin early on, and kick Barnes’ butt for putting up with her shit, but sometimes doing nothing works out. Thanks for writing.

Great story! 5*****! That's an accurate description of the rebuilding after betrayal. I would love to read additional chapters.

This trope is so familiar, it hurts. On the other hand if LW classics have all their chops lined up, why writing something new?

As usual, a well written story. I don't speak Spanish but know enough to follow along. I loved the way you incorporated it into the story.

Thank you for shedding some sunshine in a world that seems to be getting cloudy.

Namaste

Seems that Collins should have brought up the idea of an open marriage with Barnes in a hypothetical sort of way. She would have learned that it was impossible and then she could have made the decision as to whether dating adventures or remaining married was more important.

Really enjoy the quality of your writing, your uniquely memorable characters (how can one not love Kiersten or Ripley to name but two) and most of your storylines. This storyline is in so many ways LW predictable/stereotypical (not necessarily a complaint, just an observation). While true to your talent the characters have depth, with the possible exception of the “loving wife” who is not as well developed (not unusual for LW tales, which is a bit ironic). Do like how you painted different daughter personalities, moved the setting for much of the story to Mexico, and as a near hopeless romantic created love between Barnes and Nita. If I seem less than enthusiastic, that is probably my problem with the category’s typical storyline and not with your writing, which I liked.

You hit a out of the park home run on this one...!!! It makes common sense, which is rare on this board, it has great pacing, great and appropriate dialogues, proper foreshadowing, a consistent logic train, and no blatant plot holes or those nasty off stage deux ex machina entrances to fix plot holes. In short a real tour de force blackrand...

5 very well deserved stars for an outstanding job... I personally look forward to rereading and enjoying this so it is now on my favorites list..

Randi

I've read all of your stories, here. You have an amazing talent. Vivid in description and colorful in vocabulary. Made me angry at times and pulled the heartstrings at others. I guess I'm trying to say that you are an AWESOME writer. This tale grabbed me from the first few paragraphs and didn't let go. 5 stars, and thank you for your time and talent. DMW

Just noticed I'm the 1st commenter. WOOHOO lol. DMW

Damn good story.

Also, at my age I almost always find sex scene descriptions boring. This one was, however, very good.

There are no bad blackrandi stories – ever.5*

Good story but the ending was a disappointment. Yes - he learned to live well and formed a great new relationship. But then, for his new lady to conspire with his deceitful ex ...... !

Wonderful as always! Thank you.

Until you gave it a label — “hybrid romance” — I didn’t fully understand why I enjoy your efforts so much! And this effort certainly fits the bill!

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It was a little hard to understand how Barnes kept his cool when Collins hit him with her demands. Especially when she admitted to fucking 2 guys. But his solution….getting out of there….was perfect…and it sure did work out for him 😎

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Collins was the stereotype Martian Slut Ray victim. No matter how patiently and clearly Barnes tried to explain the impact of her behavior and attitude was ON HIM, she never listened. Refusing to get counseling was another indicator that it was all premeditated and purposeful. She dug her own grave.

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With the second half of the tale being a delicious romance, it almost didn’t matter to have Collins show up and get her “closure”. If not for the daughters, I suspect Barnes would have to.d her to pound sand. But in tne end, he did the right thing.

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Easy 5 *****

Nicely done. A totally enjoyable read.

Has the author not watched Queen of the South? Sinaloa is cartel country.

Why would you make Barnes move to cartel country? 🤣

Very good story, happy ending and all that. It's too bad real life story don't end as well. 40 years ago my first wife divorced so she could go out and fuck around. Left the girls with me then I met good woman the ex took the girls away and the rest of my family I never talked to for 40 years, that include a sister, aunt uncle, mother, and two cousins and I did nothing wrong except find and marry a good woman that lasted for 40 years. So much for the good guy winning.

I enjoyed the story. Well written, a bit padded.

I think the main issue for me was I didnt feel any real emotion in their marriage. Yes he got pissed but both he, and her, felt kinda empty in that department.

The only other real issue is, like most stories like these one of the kids, or all of them as if often the case, always tells dad to wait it out and then everything will go back to normal and be like before. Honestly, I doubt there is one in 10K kids who would ever make such a statement, unless there are more brain damaged offspring out there than we admit to.

Great story, as always!

Reminded me of cagiva girls stories...

She was bored but her plan to cure herself of her boredom blew back in her face and instead she gave her husband the excitement and the adventures that she craved for herself.

Another 5* tour de force from Randi.

Nothing original, but we'll written, wonderful, feel good, story. 5* all the way.

I like the way you did that. Thank you

WONDERFUL, AS USUAL! i don't know how you do it, but you're the best of the best. Looks like everybody got theirs in this story, including Collins. She was the smartest thing that ever happened and it came back to haunt her. 10 stars aren't even close, just like all your work!!

Nice story, well written.

Great story as usual. Very entertaining and romantic. 5stars

Great story. I always enjoy your work. Very nice transition and not a lot of drawn out drama. Just the ol. You want to do that. Bam lets get divorced. Very realistic tale.

Another great story! Thank-you for this very enjoyable read!

Awesome, your heroine is a lookalike for Salma Hayek. …. She can be your goto gal like Pauline French is for just plain bob

Great Story Randi. I was afraid Barnes was going to discover that Nia had a loner in Los Michos; but you spared us the pain of that kind of calamity.

5*****

Yes, there are no bad Blackrandl stories and also perfect grammar which so many LW authors should work on. 5+ as always!

What a fantastic story

A LW story then a longer Romance story. Guess it had to end Hallmark Movie style but you could have left the forgiveness part out and not hurt my feelings.

I find that you have a unique way to lead the reader on a pleasant journey through your stories. This journey led us from hate and disappointment to a great joy of fulfillment. I must admit the journey was tiring, but very inspiring. Finally, it is a definate five

Well done. Again, your talent as a writer is clearly evident, please them coming!!

Set, as it is right after a very dramatic, fast-moving scene, this paragraph was one of the most effective I've read in quite a while: 'It was time to beard the lion. I couldn't procrastinate, couldn't live in limbo. When I pulled up into the garage, her car was there. I sat for a minute, seeking a calm center, sighed and went in. My stomach felt like I was going to have heartburn, and I went in and got a glass of milk to settle it.' It was a masterful transition and nailed down the whole first part. Good writing. Very good writing.

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On the whole, this piece was one of the most evocative and realistic things of yours I've read. Loved the sister's bantering and even acting as the opposing voices, like the angel/devil pair on his shoulders. Very well done. Something about this piece resonates. Fives all around.

kinda sad that this's a fantasy