All Comments on 'Erin's Fantasies: The Schoolgirl'

Thank you for posting.....An excellent first story posted!!

A little feedback.....

One of the primary elements for me....is to always ensure as the writer you are able to build and develop a story by creating a realistic scene setting.....and you did just that?

So many writers forget that as the reader....we look to let our imaginations take us to the place.....and build, through your words you managed this!!

I am keen to see your next work and the further development of Erin and Charles.

Best wishes

Johnamitchell07@gmail.com

John

Really well thought-out, hot story. I hope to see more of your work here.

the story is an enjoyable read with solid pacing and well put together imagery, the only problem is that the way you start the story suggests modern day america but Erin then speaks of teaching as a boys club when the majority of teaching positions are held by women including the being the majority of principals.

Good story but I don't see how they met you give some back story but not enough for me would be nice to see more of these two

I could almost feel her frustrations and cumming.