All Comments on 'Evening Light Ch. 02'

by zouzouni

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AlexandergarahamAlexandergarahamover 13 years ago

Good story line, but why are the chapters so short?

peteinchicagopeteinchicagoalmost 14 years ago
not great but not bad

Lucas is about a dumb fuck though, isn't he?

catman71catman71about 14 years ago
good story

what hte fuck is wrong with lucas, get kicked in the a time to many, i now he has to come around, but make it painful for him, for once i would like to see the guy have to endure the problems AND I AM A GUY

cantfightfatecantfightfateabout 14 years ago
I like this one too.

Simple and a little predictable but most romances are. I'm going to start sounding like a broken record but I have to mention the spelling of homophones again. Here/hear, there/their... these are little errors that take away from the quality of your work. Maybe ask your editor to have an extra close look for those. Other than that, nice flow. Looking forward to more.

luv_romanceluv_romanceabout 14 years ago
nice story

please do write fast. there are less conversation in your story. but it is ok. more interaction with lucas and grace please. i would love to read banters being made left and right. hahahaha. :)

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