All Comments on 'Everything Will Change Ch. 01'

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Exintaris almost 13 years ago

Interesting, but raises questions

I hope we will find out why this particular woman has been picked, how her disappearance is going to be explained, all sorts of things.

Corpse_rider almost 13 years ago

When?

Hmmmm. Not sure about this one. The kidnapped girl to be married to a crime boss? - doesn't sound very convincing. Hopefully further chapters will add credibility to this set up - like he has lots of wives . . . I will with hold judgement until then.

AllosaurusRex almost 13 years ago

Good start

IzkaPlm18 almost 13 years ago

Well done.

Hope you submit chapter 2!!!! :) This sounds interesting :)

Good start on the first chapter with the information!