Evil Bitch

Although there is no character development nor plot, I enjoyed the 1st chapter. In real life, no man could get so lucky. As an avid reader of mother/son incestuous love stories, this story is a complete change of pace. Everyone has sexual relations withut any concern. Except for the mother's emotional loss due to the lack of affection from her husband, no one appeaars to be sexually repressed. There is not the least bit of hestitation when it come to sex. Due to the uniqueness of the story and resolving reasonable doubt in favor of the author, I rated this chapter 5 stars.

Was there a plot? Why was he in prison? Why does he say evil bitch? What's up with the sisters? This just drop this in the action and did nothing to give any context.

Why the hell would you call this story “Evil Bitch” and then not bother describing any of this evilness?

Besides that your stories read like frat boy bragging but without the other bros around to yell “bullshit!” when it gets too implausible.

Unfortunately, I must agree with TattooTales comments.. I too gave you ⭐️⭐️⭐️⭐️

The grammar/spelling errors are what they are. It's got some hot moments. It's not very believable, though, which took me out of the story. Every woman seems pretty interchangeable rather than their own person. They all want their asses fucked, all are incredible cocksuckers, and all just seem to be there for the MC's enjoyment. It doesn't ruin the story, but I could only go four stars.

That was one hell of a start, I'm not sure how much more crazy can it get but I can't wait to find out.

Some of them were actually correct. If you're referring to a polytheistic religion gods would be right. In that case Gods should be gods. Mom would only be capitalized as a form of address "hey, Mom..." but not when just referring to her "his mom opened the door".

As for the "getting ate out", while it is incorrect, it was also a quote from the character who probably isn't that concerned with grammar, especially right then.

As the title says, I loved the story, it's very hot.

I assume (Perhaps wrongly), that some of the background will be explained later... especially why all women in the story seems to fall over their feet to fuck the guy.

Fun, but not really believable ;)

Despite the errors, I rate it as a 5 star story

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But most of Wordsmith's list of errors did not affect the readability of the story, and it would have been better to send them to the author as Feedback - posting them publicly in the comments is just showing off.

Why don't you take your pedantic pontificating about spelling and cram it up your ass? No-one gives the fuzzy crack of a rat's ass about your opinions, and if the only thing you can do when you come onto a porn site is think about correcting spelling, then you've got bigger problems than getting in a snit over spelling! Why don't you fuck off back to where you should be; the Old Fart's bench in the nearest public park, where you can burble away to your heart's content. Just fuck off, why don't you, your smug, anal retentive scribblings are really, REALLY fucking annoying, just go rent time with a hooker so you can bore the shit out of her as well.

Evil Bitch (3)

wd40 (WD40)

Bitch (bitch)

lips envelope (envelop)

Gods (God)

gods (God)

(-in all her) not so innocence (innocently)

of I will (or)

mom (Mom) (10)

god (God) (2)

god damn (goddamn)

God damn (Goddamn)

breathing heavy (heavily)

he D Cup (her) (cup) (3)

are your nipple (nipples)

she giggle (giggled)

"God Damn Your (Goddamn your)

areole (areolae)

moaning loud (-now)

video tape (videotape)

internet (Internet)

an A Class Cocksucker (a class A cocksucker)

getting ate out (eaten)

not sit (now)

(SHE HAS A THICK UNTRIMMED BUSH SO HE ELECTS USE A STRAIGHT RAZOR INSTEAD OF SCISSORS AND A SAFETY RAZOR TO TRIM DOWN THE HAIRA ND REMOVE THE HAIR MAKING THE JOB EASIER, LESS DANGEROUS, AND MORE EFFICIENT!?!?!?!? HIS AND HER FIRST TIME, TOO!!!!)

removed the bowel (towel) (NO MAJOR SURGERY AS ERRONEOUSLY INDICATED!!!!)

He “licked her from the bottom of her sex to her clit in one slow motion” DESPITE “applying baby powder to treat the bare skin!!!!” (OH HOW I LOVE THE TASTE OF TALC, BETTER THAN PUSSY!!!!)

I flicker my tongue (flicked)

clam shaped pussy (WHAT AN UGLY PICTURE THIS INELEGANT DESCRIPTION PAINTS!!!! NOT AT ALL APPETIZING!!!!)

ease a single finger (eased)

red handed (red-handed)

your only young (you’re)

Why would anyone want to ruin a nice b cup with implants if you want a cow buy a golden Guernsey lots of butter.Implants are disgusting b or c cup is perfect.

A wee boy's silly fantasies. Ye cannie write.

You seriously need an editor

To many punctuation and grammar mistakes to even begin