All Comments on 'Extreme Passive Lesbian Training'

To me this story made no sense at all, to go through all that trouble

I enjoyed this but I think the training was a more erotic than the writing. The good news for a relatively new writer is erotic ideas are harder to develop than writing skills. I was less excited by the last section and think you would have been better off continuing talking about the transition from training to slave in the first person. It would add emotional context.

Keep at it, you'll only get better.

The ladies have jobs away from the team so she would have been missed

Keep up your work. I love all three of your stories.

I enjoyed the story - its given me a few ideas for one of my own!