All Comments on 'F is for Fail'

This story was filthy and depraved, Chloe, and I loved every single damned word of it.

Thank you for sharing your talent.

Very personal.

Hooked

Which is, of course, this story definitely is. I give it full marks for Fun and Sexy.

Beyond tantalizing - yes, the erotica was great and the storyline intriguing, but still struggling to know the heroine.

Damn, that is one hot piece of work. 5 supernovas.

I so love your stories. I can identify with your characters so much. Look forward to more.

Love this story Chloe. Asian girl hero. None of this victim crap. Wonderful consensual stuff. Hope there is a chapter 2.

A story from Chloe! Sweet! Gave it the max, of course. Randi.

Great yet again Chloe. Enjoyed it immensely. I love a tight Chinese pussy.

Russ.

As always you seem to find new ways to take a story from sweet to erotic to adorable to fucking hot to ...another Chloe classic.

I really enjoyed reading this story. It was the first one of yours I read. Your story reminded me when I was in graduate school. Most of my CS major friends were Chinese students from Taiwain. At the time, I was interested in learning more about them. I remember one time I asked a Chinese classmate if she would go out to dinner with me and she told me that her parents would disown her if they ever found out she did. Sadly, I wasn’t able to pursue the friendship or dinner. After reading your story, now I think I understand the issues a little better.

Fantastic as usual

Another sexy tale about the all-American Sex Queen. A sexual overachiever!

Another Hole masterpiece.. No F for Fail here. "My name is Elijah Montoya. You are presented to me by your Father. Prepare to die - of pleasure!"

Always enjoy your style. You tell stories in such an elegant way.

Dammit! Another CHLOE nasterpiece! Not "Hole" masterpiece.

Lovely. Touching. Endearing. Great detail from her POV, and great description of how he first arrived and kind of swept her of her feet.

Bravissimo!!!!!!

Ms Tzang,

With your writing there is no 'F' just 'A++++' after 'A++++'.

Thank you Cheers, Terry

Her parents are going to have a cow when she comes home with a ring on her finger.

Very much appreciate the description of intercourse from the female POV; I find it difficult to express what the woman is feeling during the act. You're teaching me things that will improve my own writing, which is far too oriented to the male side. Thank you.

Bonkers but I thought it great. F for sex - took a while for the penny (or F) to drop, did I miss something. Have to remember this story as the female POV was excellent??

Great story. A wee bit of constructive criticism for the author: try not to be quite so repetitive in your descriptions of the sexual acts. Saying something three or four times doesn’t add anything to the whole picture.

it is ALWAYS a treat when I see a new ChloeTzang story. Thank you for sharing.

Always great stories!

Thanks!

I thought it displayed the maturing of a woman's sexual desire, but a bit overboard with the Its so big and hard, Its so big and hard , its so big and hard. Ok it is so big and hard we get it.

Still just a B in sex. A is for Anal, Krystina.

Outstanding! Your descriptions of the lovemaking were poetic in their descriptions. I've published a few stories on Literotica, and I'm sure that reading this story has made me a better writer. Thank you for sharing your creativity with us!

You have a rare and precious capacity to describe in words the female experience of lovemaking, particularly first-time lovemaking. You are a singularly competent writer demonstrating a mastery of your craft. On top of that your artfulness is craftily disguised; your style soon becomes transparently invisible in the reading.

IMHO your execution is flawless. Feel free to ignore the complaints about repetitiveness. Even more, the design is brilliant. Your opening is in the full flowering of their relationship. There I found Elijah Montoya repugnant. Only then do you tell their story, and I was sympathetic and won over.

A lovely story brilliantly told. Thank you! 5 stars.

Nice pacing and voice. Took me back to that first frantic experience. Good work.

What can I say after seeing the comments below? Good as always!

Bold. You skirt the line on child abuse, put your story in a tough category, and dam! You nail it.

You drew me in. I couldn't imagine how you could finish the story in a way that would move the hearts of the 'unabombers', so I read on until I teared up a little. You narrate as if you are an 18 year old woman, having sex for the first time. Choppy at times. Repetitive at times. Yet believable. I had to give it a 5. Your writing style gives me courage. Thank you.

I really enjoyed this story for the most part - a five from me.

Just my personal view but I fel the romantic ending reduced the, somewhat, taboo feel of the story which you fostered so creatlively.

Your, now familiar, use of repetition and a mix of choppy and long sentences gives the physical passages an almost hypnotic quality which adds to the intensity.

Well done!