by Nudeman_1234
oh more please, and a bit longer if you would. This could get really hot n sexy. Nice to read something from a fellow aussie too.
Good relationship dynamic, but it feels a little impersonal, and over-simplified. A little more relational drama, close calls, teasing, personal info, descriptions… would really help things build more. If you post more, I’ll keep reading!
It's hard to make s first impression more than once. Impossible would describe it better.
@LookOldButFeelYoung, this is just part 01 which is meant to be a short introduction to the story.
This is super good start. The people making bad comments are 100% wrong. Keep up the good work.