All Comments on 'Ӕgir's Captive Pt. 03'

Darkly descriptive and I am pleased the next chapters are written.

I hope she fights and gets away but something tells me shes going to end up like dear old mum :-(

Need more of this lovely tale, me matey. =)

Hullo there! I really love your story and am thankful for it so here I am begging for more installments, pretty please???

Did a ten year old write this drivel?

I think it's funny that the last comment was made by someone who read all three chapters before insulting you. That's not a critique. That's just rude. I like the story and hope you continue. I'm excited about what may come next!

I love the story so far. It has a real story line and character development in the works. It's feels real and the emotions are raw. The only thing that gets me each time are the names I dont know if it was intentional But I just keep on getting the frozen cast stuck in my head when ever I read over the names Olaf and Sven. Other than them in my head this story is amazing.

Very intriguing, original and well thought out. The grammatical mistakes are glaring but only a few and that is a small blemish on some great character and plot writing.

M

The author lives in Wales, so no excuse not to about English ports. Also other English writers are using the English language and slang and it's been OK for people from other countries to understand. I know I will not get a reply but why use American words, slang and sayings? Were you afraid that it wouldn't be accepted and you would have got low amount of stars? Sometimes sticking your neck out and writing in the language of the country you live in rather than American word colonialism earns you more kudos because otherwise everything becomes homogeneous throughout the world, 1 flavour yoghurt!!! Think how many big American businesses have taken over the world? From food, drink, word's, slang, porn, 1 search engine on the Internet, phone's, drugs legal and illegal, TV shows, advertising, films, music, games, celebrities A to Z, reality shows, true crime shows, politics, parts of the NHS sold off to US private health, military, commercial aircraft and on and on. People need to take a stand and I wouldn't mind if you wrote this in Welsh ( well being Scottish...!!) Still could translate it!! If you take up writing again for Lit, why not give it a go and write a story in English rather than American!! You maybe surprised by the outcome. Seriously, set a story in Wales!!!