All Comments on 'Family Discount'

Very good writing. Love the plot of this story! Good imagination. The guy seems like a real person, the sister maybe not so much. I mean, we understand his motivation, b/c he'd been alone for a long time. But why was she so hot to trot? Childhood infatuation doesn't seem enough motive, b/c she didn't come see him very often. It would have helped if we heard more about her past /recent love life. She was tight, but she knew her way around a blowjob. (Maybe she learned how on the internet? Ha!)

You've overcome the hard part; you're writing. Interesting story idea; but, your writing seems awkward. Looking at your score, lots of other readers think otherwise, but I find it stiff. Just a suggestion, try reading this aloud as though it were a play. If it sounds off to you, it's off. Just a friendly suggestion.

Nice, quick one-page fapper with the right amount of action! Well done!

what kind of jerk is this brother. why don't he just replace the brakes! 20 minute job in a shop for sis. 2 hours for any other customer. care shops are rip offs...

Fast paced and very enjoyable. Better dialogue than your first which i also enjoyed.

Decent story, quite well written. I enjoyed it, though I would have appreciated a little more (but not too long) build up and some more detail on the action.

Hope Helen and her brother continue fucking .

Good times.

Awesome short story.

Hope you will add more chapters.

Spoiled by the crap about the pill.

He should have just pushed is cock in as deep as it would go and shot his cum deep up inside her unprotected pussy

This is story land no VD or babies

I liked the story but if I read one more big bro.... I was gonna swear!!!!!!!!!!

It just wasn't needed & messed up the story.

needs another chapter

Need more. I can admit I'm addicted to brother/sister stories.

Story land or not, the pill gives it a realism. The story is great and I hope there is more. College doesn't last forever and there is a future in this story line. Please be encouraged to continue it.

Hot n sexy romp in the office. Maybe they should keep going and move in together, then when the pill fails and she is knocked up they move out of the area and keep making babies. More please

Never understand how a woman can blow a guy that has been doing hard work all day getting sweaty and probably has stank crotch.hell I drive for a living and my crotch stinks at the end of the day.

No love there. Just sex for work....

Quite a way to find out your sister I'd a prostitute who uses sex as a medium of exchange.