All Comments on 'Family Fetishes'

Simple, straightforward (which isn't bad), but yes, also crude. You should also really read it more than once after you write it, the mistakes bring it down.

Not a bad attempt, but it's better to add some flavor by giving them personalities, a bit more setup, maybe some motivations, something to stand out from the many stories here.

Needs work

Please continue story the next morning more graffic

it never went pass sleeping...until now.

circling his thumb around my nipple until it harden

my father's lips tenderly kisses

myself moaning out, and feels a sharp tingle

mom and dad bite down gently on my nipple at the same time.(must one huge friggin nipple)

I kiss my mother's forehead as she sucks on me, then gives her a long, slow lick

All of these would have been caught by a proofreader...

It was an ok read but it needs more work, more detail, maybe more history as to what may have brought this incestual relationship on. In my opinion of course.

When he pissed all over her teenage cunt, I blew my wad then and there, hell, even before he stuck his cock in her fuckhole. Would love to do that with my daughter, (if I had one, lol)

GREAT Story

It was a pleasure to read this 1st thing in morning to start my day. Please write more