All Comments on 'Family Loving'

I thought that this story was really good and I hope that there will be another chapter

Bringing the parents in at the end was unnecessary. The first chapter should just been about Mark and Sam. In the second chapter you bring the parents in and their activities.

Love Brother and sister love making.

I loved the ending where the other brother and sister pairs were showing their love for each other. Hope you continue the adventure.

good story idea. Your dialogue is stiff - needs work

Please add more to this story

You should learn the correct punctuation rules for dialog. And Anonymous was right--your dialog is a little stiff.

I'll disagree with a previous comment. I think bringing the parents in, and their conversation, was an excellent way to end the story.

Made my dick hard

Big mistake following the stereotypical "mass hysteria everybody in the family tree is into incest" model. Should have left it as a secret just between the two of them.

Great start. Definitely need to keep going and get the hole family involved. And maybe add some mother daughter and father son fun as well

Brother and sister in heart and mind only - which can be enough.

Hopefully there will be more chapter!!!

Be more explicit!, would love to fuck my younger sisters!

I could only give you 4 stars. I loved the plot line and the ending. But in all honesty, it seemed like the story was written by an adolescent teenager. Some of the dialog wasn't believable because it was too blatant and obvious. I think that Samantha sobered up too quickly. The story would have been better if you had Mark continue being the voice of reason and dragging this out until the following day when Samantha was clear headed and then she resolved the carry through with her intent. I would have rated it 3.5 if that option was available.

more of this story please