All Comments on 'Family Pool'

But mate, you need to learn the difference between a hug and what is huge.

Would love to read more though.

great start, just watch the spelling and word usage.

I enjoyed the basic story-line but, seriously you need to find an editor. Too many misspellings that are distracting.

This has an interesting premise that I have not seen before, but it is in need of a good editor. Try to get help from one of the volunteer editors before submitting the next chapter, or better care of proofreading and editing before you submit. However, it might be better to get an editor.

What happened to chap 2

Mmmmm.....YUMMY!!!

Wish there was a Chapter 2 but it's been years since this one was published.

I gave up after a few paragraphs. Any standard grammar check would paint the page red.