All Comments on 'Family Vacation'

For a first submission I thought this story was fantastic. A very innovative plot with some hot sexy action but I think skipping forward 17 years was a bit too big a leap. We missed out on all the happenings in those years. Who had children? How many? What happened when they first moved to this island? Perhaps you can tidy this up in a following chapter. I for one would like to read more detail.