All Comments on 'Family Weekend Ch. 04: Home Alone'

I will be the first one to say its your story and do with it what you wish, but you had great characters and a great love story going and you have completely gone off the rails with it. I used to look forward to every new chapter now not so much. I mean she was a lovely single mom who hadn't had any in a while to getting knocked up by her brother/father to having sex with her dad to having sex with a neighbors black nephew come on

I always appreciate feedback. The story is fiction, this is true, but the events are not farfetched in families with histories incestuous relationships. As for Sally and Derek, I wonder, from your comment, would it have made a difference for you if Derek had been a white boy? That's a question only you can answer and I don't need to know, but I hope you think about it. Sally was sexually awakened and metamorphosed by Claude and as she said, "each experience has been necessary." I tell her story. I do not judge her. Thank you for looking forward to each new chapter. I look forward to them also. :-) MP2

its a disappointing turn of events regardless of race, while the characters are not real I do not feel she would cheat on claude this quickly... cant expect anyone to believe she couldn't wait two days for someone she loves to return and potentially ruin her and her daughters and claudes world especially with so much on the line.. but as I said its your story do as you wish

I agree your perspective is different from Sally's. I think she and Claude and Nel have established an open relationship and it is doubtful any of them are thinking in the moralistic terms of 'cheating' that are mapped in other peoples Road Atlases. :-) MP2

So ... is Ben Nel's biological father?

We learn in Family Comfort that Nel's dad is Sally's worthless ex-husband, Chuck Martin. In this chapter, Ben fucks Sally but no pregnancy resulted. Thanks for reading my stories. MP2 :-)

i'm a big fan, so 5 stars. each chapter is well written has a good sub-plot. BUT..... so the black kid has a BBC. a little predictable. I'm also not a fan of forced sex - and Ben and Sally's came close. very close. And like the earlier comment, i liked the romance between Claude and Sally. i know Claude screws everything, so why not Sally? but, i was hoping it would be different. On to the next chapter. I do have to pay you yet another compliment MP - the story is very addictive!

Your romantic ideals, GoDucks! They are nice, really. But recall the line from Hotel California: “We all are prisoners here, of our own device.” MP2 :-)