All Comments on 'Fate, An Unexpected Ally Ch. 03'

I loved reading all 3 chapters of this story. Hopeing for another chapter soon.

Hi Folks,

I thank you all for comments, criticisms and encouragements. I am very new to this and therefore can ONLY get better. Ch 4 is proving to be a challenge but, never fear, it will be complete in a few weeks. - JM

drawn out begining rushed sex and no end all equal a subpar story that needs a lot of work and several more chapters to finish it off properly. stop wasting the readers time either finish the story or delete it half a story is worse than no story.

you wasted your time and ours so just delete it and go away.

Going great and enjoying story right up to the point you put someone else in. Was hoping the celebration at the club was Pam going to say she was pregnant. So nope finish right when you put other woman in. Just can't stand writers who just have to screw these stories up. Not surprised there are no other comments.

once again, an author thinks more is better. what was it she said about emasculating him in ch 1? move along.

Why break the love between siblings with someone else. SICK.

Adding another killed the story for me. 1 star