All Comments on 'Fear Falls Away'

i really like it and cant wait for part 2

I have a feeling this is going to be a good series :)

Decent characterization, good flow, smooth transitions. Will continue to read.

Okay, I'm hooked! Very interesting, and just got to know what's the story with his brother! Can't wait for the next chapter :)

I thought it was going to be a beautiful sweet single chapter story- and now it looks like there's going to be more! Hooray!!! (I really hope there's more coming, anyway!!!)

I love James- i empathise with him nearly every day of my life- and i'm looking forward to finding out more out about his brother!

I thought it moved really fast. After almost a decade of anxiety issues, James was able to get physical with Burn like that so quickly? He had no qualms about his body, or performance issues? I've struggled with anxiety issues myself, so I'm sure that's why it didn't ring true to me. Still pretty hot, tho. (P.S.: I kept wondering who Burn was talking to on the phone, but since this looks like it'll be a series, I suppose we'll find out.)

well written, although there are a few typos. I'm looking forward to the next chapter.

More buildup would have been better. This story was ripe for missed opportunities and mixed signals.

But nonetheless, I want more...It's well written and engaging.

ignore all negative comments here please it was amazing and it is definately great material for series. fantastic job

I understand the previous points raised about James' anxiety being unrealistically awol in his times with Burn - but that's the point of their magical connection, isn't it?

Surely real life is realistic enough? I believe a well-written piece can stretch the truth as far as the author's imagination chooses to leap, so long as a clear world is created and all the story's pieces make sense when put together.

The way James felt more at peace the more he encountered Burn, was beautiful. When you're in an arena where love stories are a dime a dozen, you want to create a spark that'll stand out from the rest and be remembered for some time. That's what these two have.

By the way, I'm a total sucker for soulmates and deep connections - so will definitely be back for more!

AH

Cant wait for the next chapter....it was great!

This is an amazing story, i cant wait for part 2, i really like James because i realte to him a lot because i also have anxiety issue so i know how he feels, and hopefully i can find someone like Burn one day.

It reminded me of those time when i was young, the yearning, the anxious feeling of a new experience yet to happen. Absolutely love to read the rest of the story.

Great start and i can't wait for part 2... and i love how you described James i can so relate to him... i look forward to reading more about burn and james... cute couple... hehe...

this is such a fantastic story! I really hope you write some more because you are an excellent story teller!

There is no cliff-hanger or anything, but I would love to read more about Burn and James. Burn helping him with his anxiety as far as the rest of the world... or the stresses insecurities can cause in a relationship. Whether you continue or not this is a really good story. I hope you post something soon.

Peace and joy,

Shell

I liked this story. I agree with seeker - it would be good to see a 2nd chapter and see how James and Burn are moving ahead together. Keep up the great work.

You are great. I read both of your stories today and please keep writing!

James is such a sweet character :-) I love that he's with Burns and that he's coming out of his shell. I hope that there will be more of this beautiful story. :-)

Thanks

Happy Writing!

I read both of your stories and really liked them both a lot. I like the fact that it is not all about the sex and that there is a story that goes with it. Do not get me wrong, I like the sex part, but I also like that there is a plot with it. Great story and I hope to see more from you.

read this story by a different user way before you posted it O_O ..

This story is really great and I love James because I feel just like him at times. When he said that he thought about what he should and shouldn't have said or done after a social situation, I just thought, oh my god, that's me! I think this is really sweet and really hot at the same time, which is a killer combination. And about all those comments on how James shouldn't have gotten over his insecurities so quickly. I only agree with that that to a certain extent; I think it's completely realistic that he would be able to feel comfortable like that around Burn quickly, since they are totally soul mates. I would just suggest that if you write more chapters of this story (please do!) that you should show James as still being shy around other people aside from Burn. Sooooo, you're brilliant and I could go on longer but his is now an annoyingly long comment, sorry. Bye.

Thank you to everyone who commented on this, I really appreciate it!

In response to the anonymous comment that said this story had been posted before - I wrote this story and originally submitted it to Literotica about a year ago. I submitted an edited version on Monday 8th August, and for some reason it has now re-appeared in the 'New Gay Male' stories section and the submission date has changed to today. I don't know why this happened but if you look at the dates of some of my earlier comments, you'll notice that many of them were posted several months ago :) I'm sorry for any confusion it has caused. I promise you that this is my own story ^_^

As for the comments about the feasibility of James' shyness disappearing around Burn - my story wasn't meant to be completely true to life. I simply wanted to give my character his own little HEA and to show some sense of hope for people who struggle with shyness because, honestly, who doesn't want to find that one person with which they can overcome their fears and feel safe around? :)

Anon_temptations (Lauren)

xxx

I read it once, and I like it. Now I read it again, the more I love it.. Yeah, I know this is your own story.. The one who doubt you obviously not notice that the name of author when they read it.. Yeah, something might happen if Anon only want to edit this story but somehow this story appears in 'new gay stories' section.. It's ok though

Hi,

I am a mature bisexual crossdresser and enjoyed the story very much.

Josie of Augusta, Georgia

I loved this story the first time I read and now that I've read it again, still love it. Please continue writing - glad that you're back!

your story was very sweet. i hope you find time to continue their story.

i loved it.jonathan

I am truly enjoying your writing. This was a lovely story just wish there was more/part 2. Hope you are still writing.

I think this deserves another chapter. lol

oh my god

your writing is the best!

james is SO cute!

Wonderful story,your talent is reflected on your writing which is quite rich in substance,i hope you write some story son :)

The story is great and awesome, this is not the first time am reading it but it's just as hot as the first time I did.

I have really bad social anxiety like James. I hope one day I can get over it. It would be a dream come true to find someone as understanding like James found.

I come back to this story often. I wish I could give it Five Stars all over again. Beautiful ...