All Comments on 'Feeding Them to the Lions Ch. 01'

Not a bad start. Perhaps a little bit more descriptive on how the girls look, what they are wearing, etc. Will the inmates take control of the bus? Will the girls be forced to model their hot spring break bikinis, sexy lingerie and high heels for these horney guys? What will the horny inmates do to those young girls next? Looking forward to more chapters!

Absolute dismal writing that read like you chopped up the story in leaving the vital parts out.

Give it up nancy as this is a man's game.

..If its all the same Geraldine, I think I'll keep at it.

Great storyline so far, can't wait to read more

I was getting in2 it then a big chunk of the story went missing

I was getting in2 it then a big chunk of the story went missing

I've read all three stories several times. I wish I could get some rough prison meat like that. We had a transport bus come in one night where I work at and I could almost smell the testosterone.

Your use of language is excellent. If there is only one suggestion I would make, it would be to describe the girls and the black cocks in more depth. But that's no big deal. The story is HOT HOT HOT! Great job.

there seems to be lack of connection, i mean how did renee start

great story, except when did renee get off the bus, its a HUGE gap, and it makes the rest of the story lose something.....i do love the story line, but I feel as if I missed something....