All Comments on 'Fencing Academy Pt. 01'

Unless your last name is Wantabe, you are the real deal. The pacing is spot on, grammar sound. You have fallen into the accent trap, to help build you characters, after this story, do not do it again, you do not need it. Your use of foreshadow is near perfect. I take my hat off to you. Okay as they say the devil is in the details, your use of the Mercy Knife is correct, but what does it look like, we know it is small and that's about it, if you are going to use a peice of obscura, you need to give it weight.

I doubt you are a novice writer, probably you are a frustrated Journyman, but you write better than some professional novelists I can name (David Drake for one).

And in a good way.

I'm pissed at the guy who took her sword. I'm mad FOR her -- and when your readers sympathize with your characters almost immediately, you're doing it right.

Awesome. Can't wait to read more!