All Comments on 'Fifty Shades of Ray'

It seems that a chapter is missing. Whatever happened to Elaine's deal with Ray and Zara.?

As Zara doesn't see much of her grandma I felt there would be little to write about, plus I was busting to dabble with ideas I've had and not yet written about. Lucy seemed to be able to offer me a new direction and I feel there must be much more of her other activities that Ray doesn't know about. I may yet do a story about Zara, but it will probably be a one-pager. Do we have grandma/ granddaughter incest stories on here? I don't know, though someone will undoubtedly let me know.

The mischievous but ultimately kind spirit ( albeit with a chunk of self interest ) the narrator owns is an uncommon and enjoyable touch as well. I thank the author for sharing.

Full marks * * * * *

... give us something with Zara or Zara and Elaine - would love to see these characters fleshed out more, especially if Ray is there as well.

5/5