All Comments on 'Filthy Man with a Pure Heart'

I'm not sure how many readers will be as turned on as you are by your man, but I like the two of them together; they seem well-suited to one another.

An editor would help you fix the several rough spots in your English, but we can understand what you're saying, well enough.

I assume you will write more chapters and tell us of your difficult home life, and if you go to live with your man. I am curious about him, also. He had never been with a boy. Who had he ever been with? When had he given up bathing? Why does he look angry, all the time? There is a lot to learn about these two.

Also, it would help the flow of the story and our enjoyment of what happens, if you were a little more descriptive of the sex. As neither of them had been with a male before, surely there were a lot of feelings you could have elaborated upon.

In spite of your fetish with his lack of hygiene, I find your fascination with his age, size advantage and gruffness an interesting hook. I agree with the previous comment that you (and we) would benefit greatly from the assistance of a volunteer editor. But I will continue to read whether you choose to solicit one or not. There is definitely enough of a romantic element to your story to bring me back for further investigation.

There really is someone out there for everyone. Although parts made me heave, the story was told well enough to make you forget the pig.

This is a really beautiful story -- and the writing, well, it's written from the heart. And often the most intensely romantic stories are. Does the beefy guy really never shower or bathe? I dunno. I thought that might have been a bit of literary license by the author. If he hasn't in a long time, I can imagine xxboyholejoe coaxing him to get clean soon, lathering up and making love together. I look forward to continued chronicles, as their lives unfold together. I enjoyed it very much.

This proves the point that there is someone for everyone. Such a lovely romantic story.

so cute. <3