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by carl420

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AnonymousAnonymousabout 10 years ago
no

Keep your day job. I appreciate the attempt but you are not an author.

AnonymousAnonymousabout 10 years ago
Did you accidentally upload your first draft?

Dude, you are in SERIOUS need of a good proofreader...

Great story line, but the disjointed paragraphs and sentences ruined it, almost unreadable.

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