All Comments on 'First Contact: Into the Arena'

Great story, I'm really looking forward to the rest of it.

Just a small grammar note, when you have dialogue that's a question, the question mark goes *inside* the quotation marks, replacing the comma - and the end of the sentence is just a period.

"Do we have time for lunch?" she asked.

Vs.

"Do we have time for lunch," she asked?

The second one makes it look like the author isn't sure if she was asking or not.

Loving this adventure, Five Stars! Semper Fi.

I am so loving you tale. It is new, fresh, and exciting. I look forward to many more chapters. Thank you for your brilliant work!

Excellent Story 5*'s looking forward to great things up coming !

Keep going, you are doinggreat.

Please keep the story going.

Great story. Can't wait for of their adventures.

Great story :) Can't wait for more.

You really need to come back to this story! Lots of people waiting for more!

Amazing work. Not just as a first SciFi attempt, but as literature. Very enjoyable. Please continue the saga!

I am now a real fan of your writing. Your stories show that you are fair in your dealings with others and a true romantic with your endings of your stories. Sex in a story can be either good or evil, but you grace yours with love. I really approve!

Good story, tbh it could have been longer and continued on directly from the previous chapter, rather than a look in the rear view mirror. That said it worked well as a chapter, though speaking as a sci-fi reader of many years, the likelihood of a tribal style world as you’ve described achieving FTL is pretty remote, makes for a good plot though!

Keep working on this, potentially a great series

@Purplefizz - Think Wakanda...

i think you have a very good story but you do need to finish it

Wow so well written, have you ever thought about publishing stories to the general public? I think you could do good. Your story is well balanced and imaginative all at once. I do hope you plan on continuing this story.

Another 20 star story…. 😍

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Wow so well written, have you ever thought about publishing stories to the general public? I think you could do good. Your story is well balanced and imaginative all at once. I do hope you plan on continuing this story.

Another 20 star story…. 😍

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Very good story, well written. I like how you had integrated the sex into the telling of the story, rather then the story being the vehicle for sex. I do hope you pick this back up and continue writing it and fleshing out the universe and characters you have created even more. I would rate this in the top 10 sci-fi related stories I have read on this site. I can see this becoming something much bigger, if you choose to follow it, and see were the story can go in your imagination. Please, humbly, I ask you to give us more of it.

I really enjoyed both parts of your story, please write a follow up

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Add another vote for continuing this storyline. Loved it!