All Comments on 'First Steps'

Wonderful

Very nice!

I thought this was about the best treatment of the theme of the daughter's best friend being deflowered by the older guy that I've read - the motivations seemed real and both players were moving slowly

Five stars

Very realistic, nice to read about a full pubic bush nicely trimmed.

Dude

So good

What a great story but, holy shit it was hard to read and keep track of the thought process. This author needs some help for his writing. First thing he needs to do is learn to keep his paragraphs much shorter. They should be kept between three snd six lines each. His choice of words needs work and his sentence structure needs work as well. In short heneeds to have someone help him by editing the entire story. MM

I think the author overegged the pudding: the virgin had an orgasm her first time (statistically unlikely but required by the formula) and that was fine (I know what is required in stories in this category) but the virgin then - without being warned that buttfucking was on the menu - happily goes along with it (every thing else seems to have been taken slowly and after full discussion)

Our hero goes out and runs a 5k despite the fact that he hasn’t run any distance for an untold number of years Did it in not much more than 30 minutes - that’s how long it took him to find her at the finish line It is a given that the guy has outstanding stamina -in bed - but on the pavement with zero conditioning - gimme a break

I thought the story was first rate until the first 5k - then it went over the top Too bad - absolutely formulaic after that