All Comments on 'First Time'

Nice narrative but a little over the top as too much activity is crammed into too short a time AND... Shazia is between his legs and giving head when all of a sudden... "I could feel the cum boiling in my nuts. "Linda," I gasped," Where does Linda pop out of?? Then again later... ""Oh cool!" Shazia squealed, scrambling off the bed and positioning herself on the floor. "Come on," she demanded, "my cunt's waiting." I got down on all fours and moved behind Linda."!!! Linda pops up again!!!

Looks like the authors fantasies ran out from under him or the story is originally written about Linda and then the name has been changes to Shazia except it got missed out in these two places. Please correct these inconsistencies!!

You ruined a great story with the Homosexual Pervert portion.