All Comments on 'Five Nights Ch. 01'

Didn't want to leave the end of part one hanging too long, so I submitted part two the next day

Can't wait for Ch. 2!

of issues regarding sex with others outwith your relationship. Thank you.

I like the way you are accurately covering the emotional aspects of close couples. Nuff' said.

I agree with the general consensus on the superb lead-in development of our tale. Let's see where this one goes.....

And, the construction is hard to follow. Paragraphs could be more logically constructed with better punctuation. It's hard to follow the action.

Hadn't seen this before my own (disappointing) attempt to take on issues involving transforming fantasy into reality. Very well done. I didn't find the flow tough myself, just that it's not a speed-read. I like'em that way. Savory.

what a great story, can't wait to read the follow ups....soon

Man was this boring. Who would rate this a 4? It was PG-13 at best.

Using logic in the dialog, I find this the perfect story to get a vanilla person/couple to think about sex outside their monogamous box. Wonderfully done! The seeds are planted. Friendships and relationships do grow in sometimes unorthodox ways. The credibility factor on this is 1:1 and has me hook, line, and sinker. Now, let's see where you take the reader in the following chapters. Nice job!

Again, I have a difficult time navigating Literotica. I hope there is a follow up, I love the characters, especially Marybeth. Good writing, and excellant set-up. For the next chapter, right?