All Comments on 'Flotsam and Jetsam'

What more could you want?

Excellent story, Mr. 2244.

You held my attention all the way. Great story with a happy ending. Thanks for posting! 5 *s

Great story! Was a pleasure to read and edit. Brilliant writing.

What a great tale. Thoroughly enjoyed it. Thanks for sharing

I have always liked your ability to tell a story.

This is a heady mix of romance, adventure and 1950s spy story.

I loved the suspense. The characters are colorful. The plot is unusual. Just wonderful.

Don't know what Liz saw in him, really.

Still. An entertaining story. Thanks.

"I wasn't the kind of asshole who killed others just because I could, sleeping or not." - It wouldn't be "just because he could," but because Liam was a petty dictator, and as we see a murderer. Killing him would have been an act of self-defense, or defense of the group anyway.

After what he saw, why not follow Liam and Emily and kill him mid-fuck?

I don't know why she was mad at him for not making a move - he didn't want to be like Liam!

"Well, why not? We'd all be better off if you returned." - Yes, and you'd all be better off if you hadn't taken over, but you did anyway.

I can't believe that he's feeling guilty over killing Holloway!

I also can't believe that he's worried about "fair play"! She's more realistic even though she's led the more privileged life.

It was a fun ride, but the cloak-and-dagger switcheroo at the end was a bit OTT.

Still five stars.

Thanks. A good read!

A decent tale with believable characters, well written and with a very nice twist in the tail of this entertaining tale.

Even the spelling and grammar lacked obvious flaws. Well done and thank you!

I enjoyed the story from the beginning until Alexander appeared at the end.

The well planned story with some truly unique characters was excellent up until the end.

The ending was a disappointment and took the story from 5 to 4.5 stars.

This is still one of the best stories in the group.

But I keep thinking of Lord of the Flies for some reason.

5*

An interesting story (Three stars), but it lacked transitions. Just a huge jump from one plot line to another. Get an honest editor.

... this time it was her duty to teach me how to hold my own in a hostile environment.

If he was rich he should not feel much out of the water.

For the rest a most enjoyable read.

Thanks for sharing.

thought the ending was overdone but an ejoyable read anyway 5*

You kept me reading

Even though I was sort of afraid of what was going to happen next. 🌟🌟🌟🌟🌟

this should have been named stupidity island lol. man i liked most ur stories but good god man. u sure write extremely stupid characters really well lol. omg just wow i havent finished it yet not sure i will. think i'll just skip to the end see what happens i hope they all die, so they dont spread the stupid disease that they seem to have

sorry if that was harsh. this story was bad but could have been a little bit better with an editor but man those characters were painfully stupid. 3 diff name calling for one person why. eh sorry i could go on a lot of errors would take me too long

so dreadfully and with such scant regard for the rules of grammar.

Cliche on top of one another.

But just to stupid.

Humor yes stupidity no

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Yes - strange! The whole story idea is good but no detail is correct. I know ships and how they function + the duties of those on board. Have spent time in the Pacific Islands, so I know what's there and of course you could have consulted many island tales even via internet (even Treasure Island!). So, story good, content - well look up information before putting ideas on paper

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I like Humphrey Bogart for the part of Jacob. The reality is that, with Charlie, they would have been able to kill Liam and the ghost before they got within 20 yards of the boat. Wouldn't her room be the first place they checked out? I won't mention the possibilities for killing Liam on the island. Let's just say they missed numerous opportunities to do him in. Interesting tale, albeit a tad bloody. Thanks for the effort.

Kind of stupid end fight in the ship. The story implies that there was only one way to get onto the ship. Jacob and Liz should have grabbed all of the cutlery on the ship and start throwing it at Liam as they paddled their raft up to the ship. A spoon in the eye would bind him! Being hit by flying knives and forks would be worse. Jacob could also have prevented them from boarding by getting a long pole on the ship and keep pushing the raft away. There was no motor on the raft so they would be required to paddle it continuously. Note if they did that long enough the tide would reverse and drag the raft out to sea. Also, since the Russians had there own ship, why didn’t they just board the SS Pacific?

As for the Russians and the microfilm that was just out right stupid! There would US warships in the Philippines which could have sail to Indonesia and pick up the film!

Their rescue is weak.Were the gunmen on the ship of the captain he supposedly knew.?Also they would have had no difficulty attacking Liam as he tried to board the ship.

It must take a huge deficit of intellect to maintain such an arrogant level of superiority of factual knowledge about someone else's fictional world. Personally I enjoyed the story for what it was a good sea story. The negative comments received do not reflect what is a good yarn.

My only possible regret is that the ending seemed a little rushed.

But I don't have the skill to write anything close to that good or courage to post it. I do however enjoy reading the work of others. Thankyou

This story had possibility,but you did not make the most of it..It was interesting enough to read,but became hard and frustrating to do so..You did not make him do what any man would have in this situation in real life..He knew as well as every reader that a final showdown with Liam was due to happen..The minute he saw the decapitation the date of that showdown should have been moved up right away..Jacob ambushing Liam on a trail or sneaking into camp while all where asleep to kill him,size does not come into play..How it was done is not relevant,getting it does was,hence saving the lives of the others Liam kills later..I do not understand how you expected readers to actually believe and except Jacob hiding in the bush for months while watching Liam kill off the other survivors,simply not believable. Realism is crucial in good fiction..try it some time,makes the reading easier.. 3 stars for the effort

Good story and great Black humour. 5 stars.

Thanks for the creative story and the great character development.

Clever story, could imagine this on the TV

5* romantic adventure. 7 pages long, but very worth while!

The way the end was written spoiled it for me as it seemed to jump about. On the ship then at home only to be filled in later how they got off the ship. If it had been kept current, it would have been a better read.

Very remanisent of Edgar Rice Burroughs. He wrote several books pertaining to shipwrecks, mutinous crewmen, and castaways. A nice little story which wrapped up rather well.

Love Love Loved it!!

Loved this story, got a sloppy at the end but is still very good

Loved most of the story but like Lawrie1941 below was not sure about the end. Having said that, I sure as hell could not write anything like this. Once again thank you. Mel B known as Hornydevil47.

Loved most of the story but like Lawrie1941 below was not sure about the end. Having said that, I sure as hell could not write anything like this. Once again thank you. Mel B known as Hornydevil47.

Good story until the last page. Wow that was a trainwreck.

LOL "Language"

Maybe harsh But I believe true!!

I was hoping he would die from snake bite

USMC I admit proudly Vietnam. Know there is a poisonous snake (s)

Around you kill it/them.

All rules off table sleeping is best for no resistance

VC loved grunts who would get high in field and pass out.

Never used drugs and happy when the idiots did and got killed as didn't want them guarding my back

Also wanted people around who did not hesitate when dealing with enemy

Jacob would make a fine medic in the armed forces, but he certainly wouldn't pick up a gun. He could have easily killed Liam on several nights by sneaking into camp. No fear of the courts as they were likely to remain on the island and even if rescued what country would have jurisdiction or even want to spend money on a trial?

I’m not sure I agree that the ending is too muddled. Liz provides reputation and Jacob provides resources to maintain that social position off the island. In a sense, it parallels the island. She supports him and defends him socially and he provided her with water, food, and shelter.

The person I pity most is Richard in the tale. He mirrored Jacob in many ways: he was passive, but fairly competent. Difference was that Liz saved Jacob from death and Emily condemned Richard to his demise.

Overall, enjoyable story. I like this author’s quirky detached tone. I’m not sure whether it’s how the author is or whether it’s because English is a second language, but it gives his stories a unique quality that differs from a lot of others.

The plethora of esteemed editors clearly shows that this author has something special to share. Thank you for writing!

I think it makes sense that Jacob needs the assistance in high society. Based on his father’s insistence on forging a path for his son, I believe Jacob’s family is nouveau riche. Probably from manufacturing related industry with whom the government contracted during WW2.

The “language!” comments from Liz means she’s probably a traditional WASP from New England. He being a black sheep would further isolate himself from the morays of the socioeconomic class to which he and his family now belong.

Hapless MC excellent story.

The ending is marvelous. Great & Captivating Reading.

Excellent read. Thanks.

Ok. Suspended belief for the sake of the story up until they got back onto the ship.

Every ship carries fire arms of some sort, especially in danger waters, but the worst it was her being a champion with a crossbow, doesn’t tell him and lets Liam get on board. Really dragged it down.

Not sure why he had any interest in the rest of the group since they showed so little confidence in him at the beginning.

Enjoyed your story very much and love your sense of humor. Thanks for a good read!