All Comments on 'Focus, Denial and Whipped Cream'

Yeah pretty hot, although a little more build of tension would be good. Maybe a little more stroking and licking, and stuff. a shower scene would be good.

Any way, I got a stiffy reading it. Good work.

r

this might have been a little better if there was more of a seduction, I felt you were anxious to get to the sex. Don't totally agree about some of the details (always sexier if both partners wear underwear, and tighty whities are not cute!) but this cries out for a sequel. You'll make the shower scene your own, I'm sure....Thanks for sharing this!

Even though the final sex scene wasn't great, the whole enemies who are possesive concept is the best.

Oooh, my favourite kind of story...two sworn enemies lusting after each other and endlessly tangoeing around the bush.

Until! The two sworn enemies lusting after each other become lovers in word and deed. (If they weren't already, ha!)

Well-written and eloquent, and I loved the character differences between the two antagonists. One a flashy daredevil, the other rigid and brooding. I also very much enjoyed their acerbic dialogues.

loving, sweet, great plot with suspense and beauiful lovemaking.

You are genius. There's nothing more to it, absolute genius. so sweet, so cute, so incredibly hot...the perfect mix indeed. oh, and I know adore the name Tybalt.

Since I've just discovered your stories I seem to be going through them pretty fast. ;) they're great!!!

Alicexxx

loved it!

I love this very different and hot story! It's sad that you don't submit anything anymore...

pretty pretty please write some more. I really like all your stories. you need to write more

Don't tease write more pritty please.

I have always loved this story. Just reread it and it's still a great read.

I love this story so much that I come back and reread. It would be nice to see an update of how the boys are doing, please?

Fabulous! Oh, you did such a good job developing the relationship between Tybalt and Mark, and *holy shit*, it was a hot ending. Mmm, whipped cream. Can't go wrong with playful sex. I can't wait to read more of your writing!

Loved it.

the only thing I would suggest is to seperate the part when he goes to his house..I still thought 'mark' was remembering the past....but fucking awesome.

You lie awake at nite thinking of this? Mmm I bet you're fun :P

I love it. I love the intensity :)

That was unfucking believable and incredibly hot. I rubbed one out on this story.

fantastic. love the enemies turn into lovers stories.

Perfect set-up and resolution.

The slightly abrupt style suited the tense atmosphere of this very hot story of two guys finally admitting the love behind all the teasing and apparent hating.

There's something about this story. I always come back to it. The tension you are able to build and sustain is hard to do and you pull it off again.

Like they say...there is a thin line between love and hate.

I really enjoyed this. The one thing I would have liked to see is Mark say the words or even a 'me too.' He gets Tybalt to admit his feelings about loving him even if it is by a look. I'd have liked him to return it. Aside from that small thing, there was something about these two really torturing one another for years and then finally 'growing up' and getting it right. True example of Love and hate being such close emotions.

cannd

can't believe that i'd forgotten how much i loved it!

5 stars because there aren't more

I still find it hot as hell !

Very well written, love these two and that they hated each other, only to fall in lust (and love).

Ooooh ! Plllzz give me moooore ! I love your stories - they're so smexy !!

Come on it can't end here. Great story!

I read this story again and again. I love how the two of them seem just a little bit crazy

Mark came off as a real creep. I mean, neither of them were particularly likable, but Mark might be a legitimate sociopath. He's definitely a legitimate piece of shit.