All Comments on 'Fooling Around with Sleeping Sister'

Great story

I've never read a story like it.

Firstly you need an editor so that your writing is erotic and not comedy. Then you need to write realistic stories.

If you had written this as a dream i would believe it.

The story needs a little grammar work to be at its best.

Work on your realism or create scenarios that don't require it.

Ass Hole

It's so sexy that's she's "sleeping" the whole time, I wanna try it with my boyfriend

Har, de, har, har, har!

Non-English!

The idea is hot. The sex was well thought out.

The English... Well. It was terrible.

3/5 for a decent story.

i was hoping that Avery would wake up and make love to her brother though.

were the *most* annoying of your abuses of the English language, but a good little story was still apparent.

Liked the story

I have to see if I could arrange the same situation.

So English is not your first language. Is your first language Hindi I wonder. Whatever, you have written a brilliant story.