All Comments on 'Football Party'

It is tedious ...

... tiring ...

.. and ultimately ..

Boring .. to STRUGGLE ..

through your stylistic affectations. I can guess what you are trying to do, which is to somehow translate into words the moving images in your mind. But, you have to do it with good description, not with some sort of textual analog to slo-mo or stop-motion photography.

I have done something very similar. I liked what you wrote, it brought back some great memories. Readers who are jealous and of diminutive mental capabilities, may slam you, but only because they lack imagination and possibly experience.

My favorite fun is a gangbang. My husband loves to watch me take pleasure from many other cocks. Xoxoxoxoxo Annette

Stars are not working. You get 5+

This was so fucking hot! It Made me so wet!

I should not read this in the train xD

This is by far one of the best stories I've read here in a long time. I get that it was a little repetitive by the end, but as a writer I appreciate the challenge of writing a gangbang. Thanks for all you effort.I need to see more stories from you.

Never been in a gang bang, but came close once. My buddy's girlfriend (now wife), also named Amy, was really randy one night at the house four of us shared. All of us were wondering if it would really happen, but she ended up going with Tony and a visiting friend to the bedroom. Nobody ever talked about the story of that night, except for in our dreams.

Loved the story but would never call the woman names, I dated a married prostitute for just short of a year, she would never let you insult her or call her names. I would have married her if she would have divorced her husband but they both got off on her sex worker job and they loved each other. He was a nice guy, he was ok with her and I Dating. I didn’t know she was a prostitute until about three months into our relationship I found out by accident as one of my military friends let me know he was her customer after he saw us out at a bar. Also I didn’t know she was married for at least two months.

My mom was my first fuck in my formative years but would raise hell if I said fuck or cunt in front of her. My dad never swore, my mom said shit in anger maybe twice in front of me and that’s it. She would sometimes say shist, shit in German, a few times in extreme anger. But fuck me she did as well as several of my folks friends. My dad new I was getting laid at home but just let it slide like nothing was wrong. If dad didn’t get her off she would jump out of their bed with her pussy full and noisily give me extremely sloppy seconds I could get her off every time orally or doggy style. I still love sloppy seconds and I am nearly eighty years old. My wife knows about my past but is not a player, I miss the hell out of that.

One of the best stories, I've read here. It takes work to make a gangbang story work. You did a solid job. The "Mmm" became a bit repetitive, but all in all a great story. Favoriting it!

If I could get my wife to do this...that would be amazing

Awesome job on this story, I love the way you played it out and the last scene with her hubby!! Thank you :)

You write good gangbang and similar stories only the expressions and descriptions in your dialogs are too monotone and repititive. Work on that and your stories can achieve greatness in this genre .

Looking forward to part 2 please?

I found this story right as my wife and i are discussing doing something very similar to this. Inspiration everywhere in this story. Thanks!

The atmosphere, the desires, the hesitation and acceptance, all terrific. But he actual sentences describing the sex were, as others said, tedious and repetitive.

Great sense of communication, making sure the wife had agency...

Ethical sluttines. Truly, the best.

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Love the work up and everyone was taken care of. My only suggestion is they take showers before they go back to their wives. Women’s sense of smell will never let that pass. Love her workin her ass and pussy to make herself cum.

I’m like Annette and love trains but I like the men to be a little more in control, letting her know she is on the receiving end.

Awesome. What a hot wife

Hot, but he should lick her creampie and suck all their cocks clean. I hope you keep writing.

Good cuckolds are also good fluffers so wifey can have and experience lots of orgasms and repeatedly fucked by other friends.

It was good but a bit long.

Surely this is just the beginning? There should now be a middle and a end! This is too good a story to end here!

I loved the story. The story was developed slowly and erotically. The sex scenes were not hurried. Their pace pumped up the anxiety. However, in stories like this I always like to read about the following days. After the lust has subsided and more sober minds are working the discussions can be almost as suspenseful as the sex. Plus it kind of the wraps the story up neatly.

Wow.....very hot. I LOVE watching my Hotwife get fucked and then reclaiming her.

Good time reading. You can let the story die there or ramp it up changing the direction. What if a few days later while he wasn't home 1 of the more dominant came over without ask either of them fucked her a left her no with no words after he finished with her? Maybe she wouldn't tell her husband not wanting to break the friendship off, but it continued and took on a life of its on perhaps even during some public event without her husband knowing. FOOD 4 THOUGHT

God Damn ! That was great!

Best I have ever read!

Loved it! I imagine a lot of women getting off on this idea, and some that actually experience it. Although I expect the aftermath may be really awkward.

I don't know why some feel that name calling during sex is a problem. In my limited experience, in the heat of passion, women actually enjoy it. Calling her a slut, cunt, or whore, is almost verifying her sexual freedom; to get what she wants, without shame.

Your imaginative writing makes me ask why I bother writing myself; it's so damn good. Proof again that LIT is better than porn. Best score. 5 STARS

Yeah right. All your stories are the same with a tiny change here and there. The repetitive nature begins to bore.

My bf had a super bowl party there was 8 guys and 3 girls. The guys got the girls to strip and put on a show for them at half time. Then my bf started playing with his friend's girl. The others guys started touch us it ended with the guys fucking or getting sucked by us girls it was awesome.

I must agree with a few of the comments about the repetitive nature of the story. It’s just stretched out when it really doesn’t need to be. All of the stories by this author are minor variations on the same thing again, again, and again.