All Comments on 'Forbidden Fruit'

It will be fun to see how things develop between them as time goes on...

Well that was fun and a very enjoyable read. Thank you.

very well written ^^

Not that well written. Ashley has to strip for the spanking, then gets up on the bed. Later she removes her panties which were previously removed. Proofread, please. Otherwise, not bad for first story.

I think for a start it is a great story and i am looking forward to read more from you. You should proofread urself or let someone else proofread your works, it helps with grammar, spelling and story lining :). Still Great work and keep it up.

Parputter69 Ashley kept on her bra and panties while being spanked. I think you misread some stuff but thanks for the feedback.

Poorly written and not exciting.

I think for your first story it is very good. Please keep up the writing. I felt youcaptured the atmosphere perfectly well. Take any criticism as it is meant , helpful and constructive. Writee another storry soon.

Good story, waiting for part 2. Heed the comments about proofreaders and time lines.