All Comments on 'Forbidden Fruit Ch. 01'

Very hot - looking forward to part 2!

Absolutely brilliant! So well written and sexy as hell!

Best story I have read on this platform so far. I love how you described his emotions and thought process especially throughout him realizes his obsession of Phoebe. My only concern would be the build up of Tom's success is slightly to long. I feel like most of the readers on this platform will not make it past the beginning. That is just my opinion on what I have seen and I do not know if it is true. I loved it though and personally this is the writing style I enjoy more. I hope you continue writing erotica or in general. I believe that you will do amazing work.

learned...not "learnt". There is no such word.

learnt actually is a word, and is more used in british english. Both Learned and Learnt are correct.